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Review:onestop_hpfan18 says:
Oh. My. Merlin. This was just a gripping prologue... it had me enthralled from the beginning and Lorcan being pulled by the man he had been watching for so suddenly that it had caught him completely off guard, frightening him, really was unexpected and had me sitting at the edge of my seat the whole time.

I thought you wrote from the mind of a ten-year-old boy quite well and I can remember spying on my own neighbors with my cousins and sister when we were younger, too. You really did Lorcan's character justice by really showing what was going on inside his mind as well as what he was seeing and experiencing at the same time; this prologue was very well paced and gripping throughout the whole thing. I'm definitely glad we were paired up for the review exchange because I'm looking forward to reading the rest of the chapters that are posted for this story. 10/10

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm so glad you enjoyed the first chapter. This was my first attempt at writing from a child's POV. I'm so glad his voice rung true to you (and I totally used to play spy as a kid too!). I'm glad you found the pacing to be okay too. The story has a bit of a slow set-up so I really wanted a fast-moving, action-y opening. I hope I hit close to the mark.

I'm glad we got paired up too! I'm planning on getting to your reviews this weekend. I love next-gen so I'm super excited to start reading your story!

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