Report a Review

This service is designed to allow HPFF users to alert the staff about inappropriate reviews.

Review:daretodream says:
Hello!

So, I really like Cadmus! He's different from his brother but there are some similarities as well. All I can think as I read this chapter is what a challenge it must have been for you write in the older dialect like this. Maybe you get used to it? Either way, kudos to you!

I really really like Astrid. She isn't prim and proper, which in this time period is most certainly a rarity. And then I can't help when I read this story comparing the boys to the Hallows they eventually possess. Instantly it pops into my head that Cadmus got the Resurrection Stone because something terrible happens to her and he needs to see her again. This is just my own speculation of course.

The events flow nicely through the chapter. I never got bored with what was going on, which is certainly a good sign, because sometimes that happens with fics in this era. Good work!

I really do think that Cadmus and Astrid's conversations seem realistic. I also think it is cute how much they miss each other when they don't see each other for a little while. Love it!

My favorite part of the chapter is when Cadmus thinks to himself how Ignotus would tell him to keep his cool around Antioch, even when he is goading him. It was a nice connection between your characters/chapters.

Keep up the good work!

~Cassie

Author's Response: Hey there! Thank you for coming by again!

I'm so glad you like Cadmus because I love him as well. He does kill himself in the end, and that's probably why I just want him to have a nice childhood.

As for the older dialect, I think it helped that at the time I began writing this story, I was reading Pride and Prejudice. So I probably owe a lot to Jane Austen! Now it comes a bit more easily than it used to in the beginning though. So like you said, you do get used to it.

Also, I can't tell you how happy I am that you like Astrid! She's one of my favourite characters in the story and I have a lot planned for her! But I'm not saying anything more than that about her future! Spoilers everywhere!

Anyway, thank you so much for your compliments and for offering to review! Reviews like this always encourage me to stop procrastinating and get to working on the next chapter, which I tend to do a lot. So thank you!

-Manno

Your Name:
Reason for this Report:

Examples:
  • The review is offensive.
  • The review is spam or chit-chat (not actually a review).
  • The review was double posted.
  • The review has formatting problems.
Submit Report:  





All stories remain the property of their authors and must not be copied in any form without their consent. This is an unofficial, not for profit site, and is in no way connected with J.K. Rowling, Scholastic Books or Bloomsbury Publishing or Warner Bros. It is not endorsed by any of the aforementioned parties. Rights to characters and their images is neither claimed nor implied. The use of photographs and/or the likeness of any person contained herein does not imply endorsement of any kind. Any depictions were obtained through publically available sources and therefore fall under fair use. Although we may provide links to other websites, we are not responsible for any material at these sites. You acknowledge that you link to these other websites at your own risk. All original administrative content is copyright of the site owner and must not be copied in any form (electronic or otherwise) without the prior consent of the siteowner. ©2000-2012 Fanfictionworld.net

[terms of service] [report abuse] [privacy policy] [site credits]
 
 

navigation

home

search HPFF
read stories
write stories
login/register
get help
site links
forums
podcasts
Terms of Service
Site Rules
contact us

  
 
 

categories & genres

Genre:
- crossover
- drama
- fluff
- general
- horror/dark
- humor
- mystery
- romance
- action/adventure
- angst
- au
- young adult

Popular Pairings:
- harry/ginny
- ron/hermione
- james/lily
- draco/hermione
- more...

Format:
- one-shot
- short story
- novella
- novel
- short story collection
- songfic

  
 
 

quick links

my account
ToS
random story
site rules
help
merchandise


  
 
 

fanfictionworld.net