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Review:daretodream says:
Hello!

So, I really like Cadmus! He's different from his brother but there are some similarities as well. All I can think as I read this chapter is what a challenge it must have been for you write in the older dialect like this. Maybe you get used to it? Either way, kudos to you!

I really really like Astrid. She isn't prim and proper, which in this time period is most certainly a rarity. And then I can't help when I read this story comparing the boys to the Hallows they eventually possess. Instantly it pops into my head that Cadmus got the Resurrection Stone because something terrible happens to her and he needs to see her again. This is just my own speculation of course.

The events flow nicely through the chapter. I never got bored with what was going on, which is certainly a good sign, because sometimes that happens with fics in this era. Good work!

I really do think that Cadmus and Astrid's conversations seem realistic. I also think it is cute how much they miss each other when they don't see each other for a little while. Love it!

My favorite part of the chapter is when Cadmus thinks to himself how Ignotus would tell him to keep his cool around Antioch, even when he is goading him. It was a nice connection between your characters/chapters.

Keep up the good work!

~Cassie

Author's Response: Hey there! Thank you for coming by again!

I'm so glad you like Cadmus because I love him as well. He does kill himself in the end, and that's probably why I just want him to have a nice childhood.

As for the older dialect, I think it helped that at the time I began writing this story, I was reading Pride and Prejudice. So I probably owe a lot to Jane Austen! Now it comes a bit more easily than it used to in the beginning though. So like you said, you do get used to it.

Also, I can't tell you how happy I am that you like Astrid! She's one of my favourite characters in the story and I have a lot planned for her! But I'm not saying anything more than that about her future! Spoilers everywhere!

Anyway, thank you so much for your compliments and for offering to review! Reviews like this always encourage me to stop procrastinating and get to working on the next chapter, which I tend to do a lot. So thank you!

-Manno


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