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Review:EverDiggory says:
Finally here!

Woo! This was really busy, there was so much happening it took me awhile to sort through all this!

I was really excited when I realized this was a Lucius/Narcissa, but I don't think it will really be a focus point since this is more of a detective story!

I'm not going to be able to use the usual set-up, so if I ramble, I apologize.

So, I realize you were worried about how you wrote this style. I think you can put those worries to rest because I think you did wonderful. The whole chapter was very eery and quite creepy. I shivered once or twice so I wouldn't be too uptight anymore;P I think you did quite a good job.

The characterization is definitely tricky with such a large amount of characters! I think what you had will suffice, but I do think that in the next chapters you should probably work on it! I really do think that you had a good amount for the first chapter, so I wouldn't sweat it!

I think the plot is terribly interesting! You really captured my interest and I was on the edge of my seat till the very end. I'm really looking forward to the next chapter.

I really like this and it is so, so interesting. I love how all the characters are connected! I think this is a great start to whats sure to be a wonderful story!

I don't really no what else to say, to be honest. Thats really all you mentioned in the areas of concern, but next time (and I do hope you rerequest) if you'd like me to elaborate on more subjects, I'd be happy to do so!

xx

Ever

Author's Response: Hey, thanks for stopping by! :)

Yeah, Lucius/Narcissa will be mentioned and will definitely come up, I promise you!, but it isn't one of the main focal points, really. Sort of an incidental pairing, if that makes sense :D

Don't worry about rambling - rambling is perfectly fine! :) Thank you so much - I'm so glad you found it creepy, haha! It's a new thing to me, so I'm glad you liked it.

I know! Sometimes I wonder why I decided to have such a huge cast, haha, but thanks for the advice! I'll definitely keep an eye on characterisation in the future and making sure there's enough.

Thank you so so much for the great review - I really loved it, and thank you for all the compliments! They mean so much! :)

Aph xx


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