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Review:Remus says:
Heya! Perelandra here from the review swap!:D Sorry it took a while to get here...I had to eat. hahaha!

Aside from my own fic, yours have been the only other one that features werewolves! So I'm excited to read this! Just so you know, I'll be reviewing this as I read along!

I'm glad that you pointed out that the timeturner was a new model. Some authors forget that the entire batch of timeturners were destroyed during Harry's 5th year. However, wish I knew what the other device looks like. So maybe a little description would be needed along the story.

I like Teddy's characterization though! He seems like a young man who really wants to get to know his father and what had happened to cause him to stop writing.

And was Teddy just bitten by Remus?! Whaaa!

I have two critiques though! Nothing bad, though. The first one is that this chapter felt a bit too rushed. Like everything happened almost immediately instead of you taking your time. The second kind of goes with the rush feeling. Description and imagery. If you had added a bit more of that, telling the reader where we are, how Teddy feels, the 'mood' of the chapter, you'd make the chapter longer and feel less rushed.

Anyway! I can't comment much on the plot since this is still the first chapter. I'm interested though!

Thank for the review swap! :D

--Rosie

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