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Review:Calypso says:
Hello, this is CalypsoJenna from the forums, here with your requested review!

Wow- I was really impressed by this! You have a truly lovely writing style that seems to flow beautifully and made your writing really enjoyable to read. I thought you did a good job of writing this in perhaps a lighter style than usual (you mentioned in your A/N that you usually write more serious things), without making it too fluffy.

I actually really like that this is a Lucy/Ted pairing- I enjoy reading more unusual Next Gen pairings and it's always nice to see some of Lucy, or Molly, or Roxanne instead of just Rose!
Thinking about it, I suppose the plot is a little bit cliche, but honestly you write it so well that it hardly seems to matter! And your characters seem developed enough for them to carry it through.

Which brings me to your characters! They were one of my favourite things in this fic. Lucy is instantly likable and her rapport with Scorpius sounds exactly how friends talk. I'm going to mention Miranda Catchglove because I think she has an awesome name, and your portrayal of Dominique was good as well. It was an original idea to have her living in France- I would love to see more of her relationship with Lucy. They both feel like really interesting people.

I didn't feel that your flashbacks upset the flow of the story at all- they seemed to blend in really well and have piqued my curiosity about what happened between Lucy and Ted. In the second one their relationship seems so beautiful. I will be interested to find out what takes them from that to the pink rose invitation- which was also well described.

The only thing I would say is that- as a first chapter- it does seem very long, and I guiltily admit to having been put off fics before because of their length, especially in a starting chapter.

However, you did manage to keep the interest up all the way through with some wonderful characters and incredible writing. I loved the sort of climatic ending to this chapter, and I think this story could go some wonderful places. Thankyou for requesting!

-Bethany

Author's Response: Hi there!

Exactly, my plot is the tiniest bit cliche, which has been my worry all along. I'm so happy you thought my characters carried it through! That's what I've been hoping to achieve: to make what could be a cliche good because of my writing. I'm so happy you liked it.

And Miranda Catchlove is awesome haha I'm so happy you liked my name for her. There was never really any doubt that she had to be named that. She's such a character and I love writing her.

Dom and Luce are going to have loads of scenes together - Dom plays a big part in all of this mess, so you can look forward to that!

About the length: I know. I've been so worried about it and I know that some people are totally put off by such a lengthy chapter. I'm happy you didn't find it boring anyways. It's one of my great weaknesses: I can't limit myself to 2500 words.

I'm so happy you liked this and thank you so much for this wonderful review and all those kind words. Thank you!


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