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Review:forsakenphoenix says:
Not going to lie, I loved this chapter. I know that you're not usually one to use adult language in your fics, but it really worked here. I think it gave us readers a very clear image of Joseph Heart and the language is kind of refreshing to see. I don't know if I'm making sense. It's just that I get a very clear picture in my head during this scene, like I'm watching it play out in front of me, and the language adds to the tension in the room.

I'm also enjoying Rose so far. She seems very mature for her age and maybe that's part of the appeal with Krum? Just speculating. It's interesting to see a bit of the publishing world, the competition to get an author who will make them millions, and to see that bitter anger when said author slips through their fingers.

I like that Heart still gave Rose a job despite the commercial failure of her book and her inability to write another book. Heart wants another best-seller, well, I can only imagine what Rose's book about Viktor will do for their publishing company.

I laughed when Rose knew how Heart would treat the lawyer. It shows a familiarity between the two characters. They've known each other and how they respond to certain actions and words. It's comfortable, the way they sort of play off each other. I like that.

I think this was a great next chapter to your story. And despite the age gap, I'm still super curious about where you take the plot, etc. I can't guarantee I can keep up with school and whatnot, but I'll try to swing by again sometime soon to read more.

I'm sorry I couldn't offer you more CC. I didn't really notice anything that stood out to me. I think this chapter did a great job at driving the plot forward a little bit. It was just enough to whet our appetites but also making us want to read more. As I said in the last chapter, your writing is really strong. It's also really polished. I'm liking it. :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm so glad you liked this chapter. I have to admit, I was nervous about the language; it's how Heart sounds in my head but I was afraid it would come off as gratuitous. I'm really glad you didn't get that impression.

I'm also really glad that Rose's maturity came through, as well as her relationship with Heart. She doesn't have all the answers to life, but I do see her as having a good head on her shoulders. And with Heart, he really does like Rose, but it's also true that he wants to keep her around because he thinks she can make him money -- which is really a compliment since that means he thinks she has talent. It's a bit of an odd interplay but I find I really enjoy writing them in scenes together.

I know you are super busy and I really appreciate you taking the time to review a couple of chapters for me. I'm glad that even with the pairing, you were able to find a few things you liked.

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