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Review:javct says:
Back again!

Okay, you may or may not have got me shipping these two -- I'm a sucker for a good-written childhood sweetheart story (maybe because I never had one)

Can I steal your talent? Honestly, it's hard to believe that you usually write more serious/angst-y stories. If this was the first story I read of yours, I would never had picked up on it.

As I read on this chapter, I think that it was better that you changed the protagonist because you couldn't have the sweet child-scenes with Rose and Teddy that you had with Teddy and Lucy.

I liked your characterisation of James. It was different to what he is normally portrayed as; I like how he had that Potter/Weasley charm (he reminded me a little of Fred, don't know why) but he didn't overdo (like he didn't think he was God's gift to woman and things like that). An odd joke here and there = a perfect James Potter II.

Just two things that I noticed in this chapter, one, why did they take a car when they, as wizards, could have easily have apparated there and saved a car-wreck and two, where did Scorpius go in the last half of this chapter? Now, those questions may be easily answered and I may have just missed it because I'm almost falling asleep as I type but I thought that I should just point this out :)

Another great chapter, can't wait for another one!

Jasmine! x

Author's Response: Hello again! I'm so happy you liked these two darlings! I love a childhood-sweetheart story, too! It's just so tragic and at the same time SO romantic.

I'm really pleased you liked the not so angsty side to my writing! You have no idea. I've been so hesitant to write anything other than my usual stuff, so this was such a relief.

I'm happy you liked James. He's such a gem. I think that's where the problem lies with some writers: overdoing characters. I really wanted to make him normal, but with a twist. (and trust me, he's got a MAYOR twist).

They took a car because Lucy doesn't apparate (she hasn't taken the test). It was mentioned in the previous chapter. She refuses to even side-along-apparate. Plus, she likes to have a chance to escape = Betty (aka. her precious car). Scorpius was by the car, watching Darren sweat. (YUM). Hah, I've just added a bit with him just now, I guess you're right he went missing a bit after greeting Darren. Thanks for pointing it out!

Thank you so much for reviewing! This really means a lot.

-- Emma xx


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