hey there, it's Whiskey from Review Tag :D
So many things about this story make me like it: 1) the Blacks, I love the Blacks and its diffcult to come accross a stroy where they are not some cardboard villains. 2) Agatha Christie style detective story (!), that will NEVER get old ever 3) good character development and style, of course, also a major plus.
I loved how you honoured the detective genre. Secret conversations in dark rooms, suspicious glances, hints and red herrings...the mood is, on the one hand, very familiar, on the other hand still exciting.
I liked how you singled out Bellatrix, forcing the reader to become suspicious, then to realize that it can't be so easy, and then to start coming up with crazy theories of their own. Making the reader think, good for you ;)
I also enjoyed how you started not with the death, but with the immediate aftermath. This way, you managed to address the irreversibility and heaviness of death instead of releshing in the shock factor.
I'm very fond of character-focused stories, and this seems to be all about the relationships between the family members. I am really curious to see how you will interpret the Blacks and I want to get to know them just as much as I want to know WHO DONE IT (seriously, I need to know. gah, hooked again -.-).
Also, I suspect the motivation for the murder will be more than just money, since heirlooms were mentioned ;) Old magical objects are the best! I hope they play a vital role later on.
Basically, good job and I'll probably keep reading this one! Although some sentences were odd and the pace may appear too drawn out at times, you have something very promising here, go you!
Author's Response: Hey there - glad to see you stopping by! :)
Haha, yeah, the first two things are the two main reasons I decided to write it, lol! The Black family are hugely fascinating, and I love Agatha Christie's stories, as well. I'm so glad you like the character development and style - I did wonder at the beginning if it was alright. Thanks! :)
Thank you! :D It's all so much fun to write, putting all those little things in and connecting them to other things in my head, working out how people connect and things like that... Bella is a bit obvious, since she's crazy in the books, but the obvious person is probably the person people would think of first, I guess :P Thanks!
I tried in the first draft to write the death, but just found it too difficult, so I'm glad you liked that I didn't include it! :)
A lot of the focus is on the relationships -I'm definitely trying to show how they interact with one another, their views and things of one another, and how things change under pressure. It's odd, but fun! Haha, I will say nothing! :P
There may well be some old magical objects later... *whistles* ;)
Thank you so so much for your lovely review (I'll take another look through it when I edit next ;D)!