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Review:manno_malfoy says:
Hello! I'm here with your requested review and I can't apologise enough times for how late it is. But I'm really, really happy you re-requested because I usually lose track and I absolutely loved the first chapter of this.

I think I liked this chapter better though! The perspective is still very unique and you string words in such an elegant manner that there's hardly a thing to distract me. I felt like there was this consistency of tone all over the first part of the chapter, this cryptic mood that just kept me on the edge of my seat, wondering what's going to happen. I also truly admire how you describe things though Wolf's eyes, keeping them rich and easy to see and, at the same time, fit to be the thoughts of a werewolf.

I loved how vivid the actions seemed to be! I could totally see Wolf hiding behind the trees and his attack on the boys. And when the other three joined the scene, things didn't get confusing and I felt that everything ran smoothly -as smoothly as they could in a fight scene anyway. Basically, what I loved in that part was being able to actually SEE what's happening in my head.

You've got this talent with details that I cannot help but mention here. It's like you're in there in the forest with the boys and you see everything! The line that really made me feel that is this one:

"Meanwhile the stag poked his head in first, his large antlers getting caught on the window frame"

I really enjoyed getting back to Remus's head again as well. It was very nice for me -and Remus- to know how the boys had managed their marvellous feat and to see how deeply they cared for Remus. And I love how they told him everything in detail so he doesn't feel like he missed out on anything; it makes it easier to believe Peter when he said that they felt guilty for going behind Remus's back.

I think I only spotted one typo, and I may even be misunderstanding something and wrong about it but I'll mention it anyway.

"...well, like a girl, during that time of the month were they..."

I think 'were' should've been 'where'...

Anyway, I have thoroughly enjoyed this chapter and I can't help but wonder about what you've got in the third one. And there's also that story about Muggles trying to harness magic; it's the kind of thing I'd love to read about. And I'm going off topic.

Feel free to re-request for the third chapter with any of your concerns! And I apologise once again for the wait.

Wonderful, wonderful job!

-Manno

Author's Response: Hey no worries! Life is life, you know. It can sometimes get in the way. Pesky thing, isn't it? XD

I'm glad that you liked the description! Writing something through the eyes of a werewolf was hard, I'll tell you that. Or any animal for that matter, specially when there's little to no dialogue. So I had to pretty much rely on description. And like you said, it felt like you were there and that was my goal. Glad I managed to accomplish it.

Writing Remus's part was fun. His initial reaction was my favorite moment to type. I had to explain what happened, how they found out and how they tried to become animigi in order to cover my basis. XD

And thanks for pointing out the grammar. I know better but apparently my brain farted or something. XD

Chapter 3 is a little further into Remus's time line and I hope you enjoy it when you get to read it. And yeah, a story about Muggles harnessing Magic, perhaps I'll request that one next after I edit it out.

Thanks for the wonderful review! :D

--Rosie


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