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Review:magicinthemoonlight29 says:
I loved this chapter! Oh my goodness. I loved the story of the boy and the house elf. So creative and tragically sad. And such a vivid description!

One suggestion I have... I noticed that Blaise's lines with Draco were all incredibly formal. For example, "Perhaps you've consumed too many and they are effecting your mind. Let's get rid of them. You no longer need them anyway." I just feel like this isn't a very natural dialogue to use with your best friend, if that makes sense? But then again Blaise is a very aristocratic young man, so it could just be how you're having him speak. I'm not sure, but just thought I'd throw in that little suggestion. :)

I love the ending! I can see it so clearly, her eyes snapping open to see him there! I'm excited just thinking about it. I simply cannot wait for the next chapter.

Keep up the excellent work,
magicinthemoonlight29

Author's Response: Magicinthemoonlight,

Thank you! You give me wonderful comments and I thank you so very much. I'm so happy to see that you liked the storyline with the boy and his elf. It is probably risky to create a book within a book, but it very important to my storyline. Thank you so much for commenting about it.

As far as Blaise and the way he speaks, I can totally understand what you are saying. It was very formal, but that is because I see him as an aristocrat as you mentioned. Whereas Crabbe and Goyle are not, so in my mind, I would have them speak very informally. Thank you for your suggestion though. :)

I'm so glad that you liked this ending. I have been waiting so long to write the next scene. It has been in my head for months and months and I finally get to put it on paper. I'm so excited for it! It is nearly finished, so there won't be too much longer of a wait.

Magic, your repeated reviews have meant so much. Truly I feel blessed to have you as a reader/reviewer and I cannot thank you enough for the encouragement you have sent with each one.

Thank you, sincerely...
Dark Whisper

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