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Review:cartoonheart94 says:
Hi, this is Cartoonheart94 from the forums with your requested review. i thought the beginning was really gripping, i could feel the desperation of alice trying to save her son. then i got to the part of the italics. you know, at first i thought they were just random quotes until i reached the 'james' bits. this made me re-read it and then i got confused.
i theorised at first that if might have been a conversation between james and lily, then james and one of the marauders. the dementor reference has made me conclude that it must be sirius talking to james.
anyway, aside from the confusing italic parts, i thought it was a pretty decent story, you portrayed alice's motherly instincts well and her fading into insanity was good as well.
i found a few spelling errors, but they were not so bad so i have decided not to dwell on them. good story, not so many frank/alice stories like this out there so nicely done.

your friend, Cartoonheart.

Author's Response: Aww thanks love. I read it and thought it might be a little confusing, but since I know the story it was hard to tell. But I'll get to that as soon as I can :)

Oh yeah the spelling mistakes. I want to edit this story further, so I'll take all your comments into consideration when doing so.

thank you so much for the review love :D

*Hugs*


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