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Review:Calypso says:
Wow this was a really great beginning!

The opening dream grips the reader straight away. It's also a good way of getting across some of AJ's back story without having to spell it out.
I found this chapter really engaging all the way through; it moved really fast and kept the reader's attention. I did have to read it quite carefully and there were a few parts I had to go back on, but that's not such a bad thing, really.

AJ seems like a really interesting character and his voice already seems to be quite defined. He's obviously got some bad stuff in his past to be serving time in Azkaban, but you've proved by the incident with the man at the train station that he's not a wholly bad guy. I think it's really interesting that you made him a father- it adds a whole new angle on things.

Amazing beginning- I can't wait to see where you go with this. Louis and Alejandro sound like very intriguing characters as does Lucy. And it was odd but sort of refreshing to hear Harry spoken of so scathingly.
Wherever this goes, I'm sure it will be just as gripping and action-packed as this first chapter is!

Author's Response: Thank you. I'm glad you like AJ. Him being a father is the crucial point in the story, from going to Azkaban to why he's breaking out. And no, he's not a really bad guy... Just a thief. :P

You'll get to meet Louis, Ally and Lucy soon, ad well as Harry. It's both fun and odd writing Harry this way, but things will be revealed.

Thank you so much for leaving such an amazing review. :)


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