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Review:Moondanser83 says:
I love how this story bounces back and forth between Molly narrating, and the reader suddenly slipping inside Molly's head. It gives the story a nice feel. One minute you're going along making tea, the next it's almost like a random thought. The flow of it just feels so familiar, because this is how our minds function when we are alone.

The flash backs of her children is heart-wrenching, and nearly had me in tears... especially when the twins were mentione :'(
And by the time I got through the vision of the whole family gathered for dinner the tears started to fall. Then Arthur walks in and pulls Molly out of her vision/daydream and back to the reality of an empty house... and I had to find a tissue... lol

I absolutely loved the line: "He is the conductor, the master piece behind each line of music that is our lives."

The fact that you did this with no planning, no editing, is astounding. Yes there were parts that were a little repetitive, but that's how people think so it fits the mood of your story.

Over all an excellent piece of work!

~Moon~

Author's Response: Oh my goodness. This one shot is so old!! It was so nice to see a new review for it. There are a lot of things looking at it today, that I'd like to edit and clean up (especially some of the grammar and repetetive language), but I am stilly relatively happy with it considering this is a first draft sort of story.

Molly is one of my favorite characters and I enjoy writing her from time to time. Annnd Arthur... love that man. I'm glad you picked out that line!! It's always interesting to me to see what bits stand out to readers.

Annnd, yes. The weasley twins always make me a bit sad, especially with as much time as I've devoted to writing George over the past year. lol.

So glad you read this and took the time to review!! Thank you so much.

Melissa


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