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Review:pennyardelle says:
Again, I really like the parts you've written at the beginning. It has a very natural and authentic flow to it! I have to admit that when I saw the summary, I thought you were going to write about what he actually experienced sitting inside that trunk for ten months. I thought it was going to be very angsty. :P It's neat to get a look back at his life.

I also liked how things we learned about him in the last chapter were included here, like the fact that he's not really interested in Quidditch. His inner monologue about all the things his father taught him provides a lot of insight into his character, too. Given that, his father's death is probably going to affect him really seriously.

The last line was really good. :) I'm not sure if it directly references something that's going to happen in the next chapter, or if it's a more general statement foreshadowing the fact that he becomes an Auror--but either way, it was a good note to end the chapter on!

Good work so far; keep it up!

Author's Response: And you're back for the third chapter! Thank you so much for reviewing all of the chapters!

I'm glad that you liked the part at the beginning of the chapter again. That type of beginning will occur in almost all of the remaining chapters and I hope that it continues to feel natural.

Haha- that would certainly be an interesting story: what happens while he's locked inside a trunk for however-many months! I'm sure someone else could come up with a fabulous plot idea for that, though. I'm glad that you like where I chose to go with the story. It was very interesting for me to write and "explore" Moody's past.

I'm glad that you liked the inclusion of those things. I included them largely because I wanted there to be some continuity between the chapters, especially since there's such a large time gap inbetween them.

I'm also glad that you liked the last sentence. I added it just before I posted the chapter onto the Archive. I personally wrote it to reference his future career in the Ministry- the next chapter is going to include another jump in time.

Thank you once again for reviewing! I plan to have the next chapter up within a few days.

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