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Review:Moonyxluna says:
Hi! I'm here with your requested review :)

*fangirls* I'M SO HAPPY YOU CONTINUED THIS! And I love your new banner.

I love McGonagall. Seriously, I don't know if it's my brain just being a bit of a lump right now or if it's just how awesomely you have written her, but I believed her. Just as I was sitting there thinking, why would Remus' dad be waiting in Hogsmea-ohwaitnevermind. Yeah. not one of my best moments :p

The smell of rain clouds, trees and fresh air made it difficult to keep him at bay for much longer -love this line. Remus really understands Wolf and he gets what makes him fight to break free.

Sirius was fantastic again, I love the bit of humor in the situation and I think the dialogue between the three of them worked really well. Trust him to take a few too many seconds to understand what's going on :)

Ohmygod and his transformation. It was so perfect. I remember that line, how Remus in the books says it's so painful every time, so I think the way you combined his body shifting into the canine, the howls, and the abrupt switch into Wolf's personality really made everything just fit.

When Wolf references the 'Other One', that's Remus, right?

Stop, Snape! Will you just listen to me? My face literally just went :O ohmygod WHY are you doing this to me?? Okay, it was awesome. The James and Severus banter, and reading it from Wolf's point of view how all he wanted to do was save his pack member was so wonderful. You really do a fantastic job capturing the canine mentality of Remus when he is transformed and it makes this so believable.

no idea who he was but hen the scent - Should be when.

The only thing I noticed was during Peter's explanation to Remus, you have him switch off a few times from calling his friends 'James and Sirius' and 'Prongs and Padfoot' - It wouldn't really matter which, but I'd keep it all the same, as a consistency thing.

Lily was so lovely. I loved how shy she got about James fancying her and how you made her figure out Remus' situation.

Once again, fantastic work! I'm just in awe with how fantastic this is. Keep it up; I can't wait to read the next chapter!

-Julie

Author's Response: Heya! Glad you managed to come on by!

I almost did not continue this! I was going to leave it with two chapters, walk away and write something else. However, Wolf's voice would NOT go away so now, instead of two chapters, this will be a 8-9 chapter story! Haha!

I'm glad that you believed her! That was the point! I was hoping someone would be confused as to why McGonagall would be lying. Haha!

I'm also happy that you liked Sirius! He was a bit hard to write. My beta said he was being too much of a...err...a non-12 word but I wanted to show that he was reckless and really doesn't think things through. He doesn't really understand that Remus is in a great deal of pain and that he's only making things worse.

The transformation was fun and painful to write. I wanted to make it different than the last transformation yet make it as painful sounding as possible. I'm glad that you liked it! And yes! Remus is The Other one.

The James and Severus argument was fun to write! Severus is a pain and James is just trying to protect Remus's secret. Of course, Severus just wants to know the truth and ignores James. The boiling point for him though was when he was hanging upside down once again.

I'll go ahead and edit that misspell. Haha! The tiny things will be the death of me! I'll also edit the consistency when it comes to the Marauders's names and their names.

I was trying to show, during the Lily-Remus conversation, that she was starting to think of James as more of an annoying human being. Lily was a smart witch so if Snape was able to figure it out, I'm pretty sure that Lily would've done it too. However, she took the news in a different way.

The next chapter will be coming soon hopefully! I just have to get past the 300 words I have! Hahaha!

Thank you for the lovely review!

--Rosie


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