Back again with your requested review!
I must say, with every chapter that I read, I continue to enjoy this more and more. You have such a way of writing Helga as a believable, well-rounded, and likable character. She's not a pushover or overly kind. She's got backbone and she shows it, albeit not as abrasively as anyone else might, but that's what makes her unique - that's what makes her Helga. In short, I really love your characterization of her.
I never thought I'd say these words, but poor Salazar. Obviously whatever happened to him concerning fire must have been truly awful otherwise he wouldn't be so scared. It was jarring, really, to see him in such a state. It was also very believable, so again, I commend you for that.
I'm really starting to enjoy Helga and Salazar's interactions and find myself wanting more. That's not to discredit Helga's interactions with other characters, which are just as fabulous and entertaining to read. I particularly liked the scene with Rowena; I felt like we got to see her softer side, which is lovely as many people portray her as a stuffy, good-two-shoes. And Elaine seems like a sweetheart indeed.
I know you were concerned about the description, but you have nothing to worry about. It was all very nicely constructed and executed throughout, painting a vivid enough picture that I knew what I should be visualizing without shoving it down my throat. Also, the entire chapter was very compelling in that I wanted to find out exactly what was going on with what I'm supposing is the boggart in the store room. So yeah, no issues with suspense either!
All in all, a very fantastic job!
Author's Response: Wow, you're back! I'm so impressed with how fast you review...I had a review thread for a while and I was super slow :/ But anyway, thanks so much for this!
I really wanted to show a strong side to Helga with this story as well as her kindness...you know, to shake up the Hufflepuff stereotype a bit :) And I'm really glad she seems well-rounded. I tried not to make my characters too one-sided (something I've had trouble with, but who hasn't?)
More will be revealed about Salazar's boggart later, and his connection with fire. So I don't want to say too much yet, but he's definitely troubled. And I worried a little bit that his reaction would be wierd or off somehow, so it's great to know that it seemed realistic :)
There will be more Helgazar moments to come, definitely! And I'm really glad you liked Rowena. She's growing on me more and more as I write her, and I wanted to show a side of her that isn't typically seen, like you said. Elaine is one that I'd love to write more about; she is really sweet, and a great match for Godric.
I can't thank you enough for this! You've addressed everything I was concerned about, and I feel really reassured now. It definitely motivates me to keep writing! I'll be back to re-request :) Thanks dear!