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Review:Gaius Scipio says:
Really enjoyed reading the first chapter and look forward to seeing the others. Just two very small details you might think about changing. In the description of Carolyn's eyes; "Carolyn rolls her slanted eyes" some might find that offensive - "Carolyn rolls her almond shaped eyes" might be better.

And you mention that Hugo is making soup, but in one line you say "letting the delicious scent of the stew fill my lungs"

"letting the delicious scent of the soup fill my nose" may work better. But this is just minor criticism, the soup/stew thing.

Great work overall.

Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing! I haven't really looked back at the previous chapters to edit them, but I completely understand what you're saying about Carolyn's eyes and the soup thing. I'll definitely go back and fix those soon :)

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