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Review:starryskies55 says:
*sets herself out to reawaken muse*

I really enjoyed this, and I wish there was more. I feel like you're building up to a big scene (with a storm). You've set the scene without really detailing Lily's character, or that of her friends/brothers- it's just facts, not personality.

Saying that, I really liked the last line, it was every powerful- 'caught in a cage of freedom' :P

Hope I've helped reawaken your muse! I really would like to see the rest of Lily's story- it's quite clearly not finished :P

Author's Response: Thank you!

That was my aim--to start the build up in the prologue. Hopefully I can flesh out her character a bit more in the next couple of chapters :)

That closer took me a while--I'm glad you liked it!

Thanks again, you've certainly got me thinking about this again and turning ideas over in my head!

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