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Review:starryskies55 says:
Hey! The two sections of this were really powerful as they were complete polar opposites, which was super effective. Teddy's hair colour changes were a nice touch, and the emotion you portrayed for Tonks was amazing. I particularly liked the link to Lily Potter, that was very nice.

The second half was also really good, Remus and Tonks deaths weren't elaborated on in DH, but I thought you did it very well, and well with the little canon we have to go on. (you have a typo though- 'ling'- lying :P)

As you said you were editing this, I have a little crit for you- I'd maybe put a bit more into the description. The first scene could do with some more just to set the homeliness of it perhaps, and in the second scene, you wouldn't want too much, as you don't want to lose the immediacy and WHOA factor, but I think it would really benefit from some description.

This was a really touching one-shot though, that I thoroughly enjoyed.

Author's Response: I apologize so much for taking so long with responding! Feel free to rant about how bad it was! I really, really appreciate your review!

Great! The link between the two moms just sort of occured to me randomly, but then I realized how intense it is. Both little orphan boys :(

ooh thanks for pointing that typo out! I'm glad you think I did a good job on their deaths. Writing those scenes are so hard for me

Description is going to kill me one of these days XP I'll see what I can do with it! Thanks for the crit!

Again, I really appreciate this review!


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