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Review:RosieQueen says:
It's Rosie with your requested review! :)

An excellent third chapter, I must say! And the best part is that it focuses on that event between the Marauders and Snape. I've always been curious about it. You did a great job showing the Marauders' friendship throughout the chapter and the story--I think it's a wonderful theme. You do a great job conveying it. :)

The description is flawless throughout the story, especially with the wolf part. Personally, I can never write in the PoV of any magical creature. I am stunned at your ability to write from a wolf's PoV. The detail, the mood, it was all perfect.

I also liked the overall flow to this, and it's great how the flow didn't get messed up when it switched from Remus' PoV to the wolf's.

Characterization was great too! Especially Sirius'. I've always thought of him as the reckless one, and you did a great job showing that. I loved that part at the end with Remus and Lily--it was adorable and just perfect! :)

This was a great third chapter--I can't wait for more! :D

~Rosie

Author's Response: Heya Rosie!

Haha, it feels like I'm responding to my own review or something.

I'm glad that you enjoyed this chapter! The prank has always been something I've been curious about. I mean, all we know is that Sirius did it because Snape kept trying to butt into their business, that James had no clue and that it was a close call. I wanted to show those little details and at the same time give it my own spin!

Wolf's part was definitely the hardest to write. I wanted to show what was going on outside without breaking from Wolf's POV. I tried really hard with the detail (always do, actually) so I'm glad that I managed to strike the balance between Wolf and what was going on outside.

I wanted to show that Sirius did not think things through. My Beta thought that he was being a non-12 word person but I'm glad that you liked his characterization! And yay! I was worried about the Remus-Lily conversation. The last thing I wanted for that part to feel was that I was shipping them when I'm only trying to show their friendship.

I'm glad that you enjoyed the chapter! The next chapter won't be up for a while but I'll be sure to hunt you down the forums! :)

--Rosie


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