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Review:Remus says:
Perelandra here with your review swap! :D

Alright so honestly...I think I'm very intrigued! The first part grabbed me to the points where I just wanted to continue with the rest of the chapter and not scroll through this. Also...I'm ashamed of this but there are so many Weasley children so I had to google who Roxanne was and who were her parents in order to get a visual in my head.

I'm a very detail oriented person. I love dialogue but what I like more is when the setting is described and the details. You definitely managed to strike the rare balance between dialogue and imagery very well. Some people bore me with too much description while others don't "set the stage" and only have dialogue. I found myself sort of like walking along Roxanne through Knuckturn Alley wondering where exactly she was going to go.

You wrote in your a/n about not having this beta'ed yet. You could've fooled me! The plot (regardless of being the first chapter) is interesting and I couldn't find grammar or punctuation problems. Overall this was a very interesting read and I want to know what happens next. So many questions I have. One of them is simple and doesn't pry too much into your old is Roxanne here? I'm guessing that she's over seventeen at least.

As for a banner...honestly, since you labeled this as a 'mystery' I would go with dark hues. As for an actress...I personally pictured a young Tia/Tamara Mowry. Like in their 20s. I have no idea if you know who they are though...

Anyway! Overall this was a great introduction and I definitely wish to know what happens next! :D

Author's Response: Hello Perelandra! Thank you so much for taking time to review even though it was for a review swap. I'm sorry for the lang wait but life had been very hectic these last couple of weeks. I had time to read your review but I wasn't able to answer it.

I'm glad I got you intrigued, that means I did my job! Whahaha doesn't matter, like you said there are many Weasley children and the HP world as simply too much characters to know them all.

Well I'm glad you think so because in my opinion I'm very lacking in details and more a dialogue kind of person so this time I really put much effort in the setting and details.

Well to be honest with you I haven't got a specific age for her but she isn't a major. I do know she is above 20 and underneath 23 if I'm to be more specific. Perhaps I will have a better answer later on but to be honest with you I hadn't put any thought on her age.

Well I had to look them and I did know who they were I just didn't know their name. I went for a banner like that and ended up not putting a clear female character on the banner so the readers can make their own Roxanne in their head.

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