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Review:Marzipan says:
Oh, another exciting chapter!! The beginning felt a bit slow to me, but by the end of that first scene things started picking up and then wow, did you ever make up for it with the rest of the chapter. And then the ending! I won't lie, I've been looking forward to Lily getting that note pretty much since I made you your forum set - such an intriguing message, just reading it makes me want to know more!

I really loved Sirius' reaction to learning that Lily had met his brother. The antagonism is still there, but it is very resigned. His relationship with Regulus is obviously a sore spot with him. Its heartbreaking how matter of factly he dismisses the possibility of his brother sending a greeting to him.

And another potential friendship for me to fangirl over! Regulus and Severus are both quite parasitic in this scene, but I think the potential is there for this to become a proper friendship. Poor Severus, though, he just can't help himself when it comes to Lily can he? Purposely putting himself in the line of fire just in the hopes of catching a glimpse at her.

I wish it wasn't so late, because I'm very anxious to read on and learn about Lily's mysterious meeting! But I'll be back to finish reading and reviewing this story. Oh, jsyk I plan on reviewing all eight chapters since I've been so slack on getting these reviews to you on time. Not that its a sacrifice to me, mind you, since I'm really enjoying this!!

Author's Response: Hi again :)

Looking back on it, I can see how the beginning could have been a bit slow. I didn't want to just throw everyone into the action without dealing with what happened in the previous chapter (particularly since I tend to leave large gaps between chapter updates), but I could probably go back in and work those details in some other way at some point. It makes me smile from ear to ear that you've been waiting for this little moment between Lily and Regulus ever since my forum set request. I'm glad it didn't disappoint!

Sirius makes me sad every time I write him in this story :( I'm pleased that you find his reaction realistic, though. Unfortunately, his relationship with Regulus is going to get worse from here on out. Eventually Sirius is going to have to deal with those feelings he avoids.

Regulus and Severus's friendship is one of my favorite things about this story, even more so than my Snape/Lily awkwardness. I once read a Snape-centric story that I really loved that played up that friendship, and it's been head canon for me ever since. I'd love to explore it even beyond this story. Anyway, yes, parasitic is a good way to look at it, at least right now. Severus's desperation to get back in Lily's good graces is rather heartbreaking, too.

I do hope you return and read on! Again, I'm so sorry that these responses took me ages!

-Amanda


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