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Review:kjp says:
I'm so sorry I've taken forever to get to you, my life has just been so hectic at the moment.. but i'm here now! :D
Your really good at writing in third person, i'm once again jealous of your story. I can't really tell where this story is leading at the moment and i'm not sure if that's a good thing or a bad thing? I'm going to take it as a good thing though :D
I can't really see Ron being that genuine to Harry though, that's usually Hermione's role "
"Don't you dare, d'you hear me, say it was your fault. Don't even think it. You're the one why we're still here, so don't even think it's your fault,"- when you said this I instantly thought in my head it was awkward because I honestly cannot see Ron saying something like that. I don't think its much of a problem though because you put in the words " in a very un-Ron manner" I think those are the words that balance it out a little
You wrote Hermione's spell beautifully "McGonagall nodded approvingly as a silvery blue substance, neither gas nor liquid, trickled out and began creeping toward the couple. Fleeting images rose out of this substance: a smiling baby with brown eyes, a little girl shrieking with laughter on a merry-go-round, a hooting owl at the Granger's kitchen window, holding Hermione's letter to Hogwarts. Hermione then re-performed her movement, and slowly pulled the modified memories out of her parent's minds, destroying them one after the other." - it was perfect I almost cried because I knew hermione's emotions must have been all over the place then. It was amazing.
10/10 from me and can't wait for more :D
- kjp

Author's Response: Kelsey, I'm so happy to see you :)

You need to stop being jealous, fool, your writing is great as well and reviewing your stories is on my to-do list (though when I don't know because everything is going too fast at the moment).

The fact that you can't say where the story is leading right now is a good thing, because as everybody already knows the ending, it's nice to know I can keep an element of surprise!

Ron, in my opinion, has emotional outbursts, and though I know it's Hermione's role to be genuine with Harry, well, she's not the one to have lost a brother. Also, I thought it would have more impact on Harry coming from Ron. Makes any sense?

I'm SO happy you liked Hermion's spell, it was not an easy part to write. Did you really almost cry? This sounds horrible, but that means I've managed to convey my ideas properly.

THANK YOU SO MUCH! You get 10/10 as a reviewer :)

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