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Review:Violet Gryfindor says:
My brain is currently repeating "oh my god" at a painful rate, but it's in a wholly happy-bouncy excited way. It's strange because this kind of story ought to be depressing and sad, but there's something in your portrayal of Rose that's astounding - she's filled with strength and fury, so like both of her parents, and yet unlike them too. Perhaps I just understand her far too well.

This story is amazing. From the narration to the language to its character studies, everything is so perfectly put together. This is the kind of story I wish I could write, filled with feeling and governed by restraint. That is what fascinates me most about this story: how you enter into Rose's mind and reveal its complexities, its contradictions. Does she love Scorpius? I don't think that actually matters - she has a strange something that could be obsession or attraction, but she internalizes everything so deeply that it's impossible to tell what she feels at all. If the story were told from the outside, it would not have half of the impact - the Rose that Lily and the others see isn't the Rose burning within.

The other aspect of this story that most captured my attention was the language and style. You've developed these things amazingly over the last year, and I know I repeat myself in saying that everything you write keeps getting better. The way in which you describe people in this story deconstructs their characters so that you can reveal their souls within a few lines. Scorpius is always on the periphery, yet Rose's observations - suitably Sherlockian, I must add - describe him perfectly. I can see him in my mind's eye; I know exactly what kind of person he is without him needing to physically appear. You make use of the first person narration here to brilliant effect. The references to colours also added to the visual aspects of this story - I ended up seeing the characters as flashes of colour rather than as people so that this story was like a watercolour or oil, without clear lines, letting the imagination take control over understanding.

This one is definitely going on my favourite's list, and I wish I'd left my Dobby nomination for a bit longer because this would have been perfect for best one-shot. It's of excellent quality and deserves plenty of recognition! I can easily see this published somewhere - you should consider it. ;)

Author's Response: Hello Susan!

I think you've conceptualized Rose well. My intent was to take that sort of humorous comment Ron made in the epilogue about Scorpius and really make it much darker. There were times where I think Hermione could have tipped over the edge into some sort of obsession, in terms of proving herself academically or trying to protect Harry, and I tried to pull that to an extreme here with Rose.

You're so kind! I honestly struggled about whether or not I was really happy with this when I posted it, but I've felt that way about stories before that have gone on to get a good reception, so I decided to just go with it. People get very attached to their next gens, it seems, and for me to not only rip apart ScoRose but also make it a bit deranged seemed... risky? Haha. It's really comforting to know that you liked the perspective and the style and really just enjoyed the plot here.

Rose's train of thought is a little Sherlocky, isn't it? I don't know that the choice was intentional, save for the fact that I love Sherlock and think some of his sociopathic flavor could fit in well with Rose's character. I'm really happy that you felt like the description fit in well and supported the piece.

You continue to flatter me far beyond what I probably deserve. I'll definitely take it -- you've allayed a lot of fears about this piece. Thanks again for your wonderful review! :)


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