Hey! So, I saw your review and meandered over here- I have to say, I really do love this story, I mean, there's action, death, destruction, it's like Christmas! Plus, it's wonderfully written.
You characterized Ash so perfectly, I felt like I really knew her. While Albus didn't get the same treatment, it didn't really matter as the story was focused on Ash's guilt and her job. I particularly loved the powerful bit about her first kiss being a corpse, and I thought she was incredibly brave to end her life instead of Albus'- although I might have ended it differently, you have a fantastic story here, and I really really enjoyed it. Well done!
Author's Response: Hi! Thanks so much for meandering over. I really appreciate it, because, you know, each new review makes me jump for joy. Literally.
Thank you. I worked really hard on Ash's characterization. And yes, Albus really wasn't so well described, but I felt if I focused more on him, I would lose my touch with Ash...does that make any sense? Its just that they were two very vastly different characters, and I didn't want this to be comparitive, in a way...
That kissing the corpse scene was creepy, i'll tell you that. I still can't believe I actually wrote it. It was actually inspired by a dream I had. Not a good night's sleep, after that nightmare, I can assure you.
Thanks again for your lovely review, it made my entire week. :)
PS. If you get time, check out my other story, Serendipity? I'd love some feedback. Also, when are you updating HAT? I wanna know what happens after their fight. ;)