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Review:Remus says:
Heya! Perelandra once again with your second review! Sorry I've been slow at it...family stuff. Hopefully I can get the third review done today before my friends come visit me.

Over all this was such a cute story! I liked how different it was from other Lily and James' first date. Its usually the same 'Lily slowly starts realize that she's in love with James' cookie cutter story line. However, the fact that she needed James to pretend to be her boyfriend just makes me laugh.

I find it cute that she wants to make the gift look perfect. Honestly, its something I would do since that's me several days before Christmas. It also reflects on how she is though. He's a perfectionist who leaves no room for imperfection. That's why James is the best match for her because he just brings chaos to her life.

Also, made me sad to see Lily's sadness about Petunia. The way you described her hurt really came through in this one-shot. James here is both cheesy and cute all at the same time! XD

The only tiny critique that I have is the line:

"So-"we both started before "gestured for me to continue.

You have the extra quotation mark and I think you're missing the word "he" in order for the sentence to make sense. But that's it though! :)


--Rosie

Author's Response: wow if thats the only mistake that you coud find than thats awesome! I didn't want this to be the usual story of james and lily in that she slowly falls in love with him but rather that it just happens when she finally gives him a chance only because she created the lie in the first place that she was dating him. I'm glad that you enjoyed this stroy! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!

~Slytherinchica08~


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