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Review:Aphoride says:
Okay, so it's been a while since I read the first chapter, and gosh, I regret not coming back to this. I really like it. It's just... gah, so good. Seriously. I promise you I'm not lying :P

The emotion is so strong in this. It's strong and powerful and tense and I can't help but feel for both Daphne and Astoria because that must be so horrible for both of them - going through it and watching her sister go through it. You've managed that level of emotion and the topic itself so well, handling it so carefully. There's not too much but not too little either; there's just the right amount and it's so lovely. Heart-wrenching, but lovely.

I loved the little insertion at the top about the rebuilding of Hogwarts and the Ministry. It set the scene really well, describing what had happened before this all sets in and I really liked it. It was just the right length, as well, you didn't try to drag it out or anything. Also, I loved your point about how almost looking past the events and pretending they didn't happen isn't really rebuilding and healing. It was such a poignant point, particularly what with Daphne's situation further on in the chapter. The two bits fitted together very well :)

Astoria. Gosh, I feel so sorry for her, but at the same time, I know she'll be all right in the end, so it's not so bad, I suppose. She's so understandable, despite everything that she's been through - her reluctance to leave her family and her sister is so true to life. It's not that easy to walk away and stay away, and you've really brought that home here.

The one thing I would say is that, while this chapter was fabulous for all the information on Astoria, it's not so big on the plot front. Which is fine because, like I said, it gives so much lovely detail and information about Astoria and because she's not a well known character we kind of need that information, but it's something you might want to bear in mind for future chapters ;)

Mm... loved it. Want more. Write more. Sorry, I feel like this has been a very unhelpful review :P But, seriously, I really like this. Honestly.

Aph xx

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