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Review:CambAngst says:
Hello, again! I told you I'd be back, I just didn't think it would take this long. Life, life and more life... I guess it beats the alternative!

So before I start, I saw three little typos and I wanted to mention them before I forgot:

-- "But life had been hard on Andromeda Tonks, and she felt the weight of it every day she rolled out of bed and looked at the photographs and Ted and Nymphadora that still sat on her dresser." - should be photographs of Ted and Nymphadora.

-- "After enjoyed the heat for a moment" - enjoying?

-- "The injustice of it that Andromeda had fought on the fight side" - the right side?

So, with that out of the way, let's talk about the substance of the chapter. I, for one, cannot imagine going back to raising an infant again after all of the trials and tribulations of getting a child all the way to adulthood. Especially on your own. That's not to say that Andromeda had no help from her friends, but I can completely relate to her weariness. At the same time, the fact that she's been through the experience before gives her a different perspective than a first-time parent. She's apt to be more patient and understanding. I think you captured all of that very well.

Her reaction to Scorpius's birth announcement was so raw and virulent! I felt the emotion really strongly. I think the reasons behind her anger, as you expressed them from her point of view, were spot-on. The war was inherently unfair in that way. So many on the "winning" side paid such a high price for the victory while the Malfoys walked away with the most important things in their lives -- their son, their freedom -- intact. I'm sure life wasn't always kind to Lucius, Narcissa and Draco after the war, but the would always have one another. And, you know, their huge piles of gold. ;)

In much the same way, Andromeda's half-truth that she shares with Teddy made sense to me. She knows that Teddy is going to discover most of these things for himself eventually. But she's just not in any hurry to have that happen. In a way, I guess it's a little unfair to Teddy. You could argue that he should be able to meet his extended family and make his own decisions. But, given that Narcissa would likely lavish gifts on the boy due to her guilt, I can understand why Andromeda would want to keep the Malfoy's away. He's not old enough to understand what they helped to take from him.

This part of the story really made me stop and think about what Andromeda did tell Teddy about his parents' death and her family's role in those events. Not much, I'm guessing. At least until he reached the age where he was going to learn about it anyway and he was maybe better able to understand. If I could persuade you to make a one-shot of that, I'd be incredibly interested to hear your version of Andromeda trying to explain Teddy's Black heritage to him.

Lastly, we come to Narcissa's reaction to her sister returning the birth announcement. Overall, her reaction was exactly what I'd expect. No arguments here. But you did slip a couple of interesting little nuggets into it that made me stop and think. The mention of how she doesn't completely approve of Draco's new, more liberated attitude toward mudbloods was even a bit jarring. When you combine that with her admission that she misses her sister, it makes her sound a little selfish. It's as though she wants to have Andromeda's company back without admitting that her own prejudice played a key role in why her sister hates her so much. That was an interesting wrinkle, and if it was intentional, well done! I think it adds just a bit of complexity to her.

Overall, a lovely chapter! I'd promise to make it back sooner next time, but I think I promised you that before. :-/ Better to just say that I'll be back as soon as I can.

Author's Response: Ugh, typos. The bane of my existence. Thanks for pointing them out - I'll fix them as soon as the Dobbys are over. (Speaking of which, thank you so much for the nomination!)

I'm glad you think I captured Andromeda's difficulties - obviously, I have never even raised one child, let alone my grandchild as well, so I was a little worried about how it would come off. I'm glad that you felt like it came off realistic. That's always very important to me.

And yes, that's *exactly* it. I don't even know if I believe that the Malfoy should have been punished - I definitely don't think Draco should have been, and I'm pretty convinced that any supporting role Narcissa played (I don't think it ever went beyond that) was rightfully made up for in the eyes of the law when she lied for Harry (whatever her motivation). Lucius, on the other hand, I'm less sure about. He wasn't totally happy about having Voldemort around, but who would have been? I do feel like Lucius lucked out of prison time, and beyond that, Andromeda's feelings clearly would not have been limited to "what's right in the eyes of the law." Narcissa got to keep everything Andromeda lost. Her trying to give Andromeda money in an earlier chapter only made it worse. She meant well, but how is Andromeda going to take that as anything but Narcissa being condescending and entitled?

I will definitely consider making a one-shot in which Andromeda explain's Teddy's Black heritage to him - that's actually a really great idea, and I'll tell you when I get it done! (Now it's taken root in my brain. I will have to do it. :P)

The little bits at the end that you found jarring were definitely intentional, and I'm glad they came off the way they did. I see Narcissa as someone who maybe have recognised the error of her ways on one level, but keeps on having the same prejudiced opinions on another, you know? "Oh, no, I would never call some that to their face! Of course not!" Except that she's totally still thinking it.

(I may or may not have family members that are like this.)

Thank you so much for the review! ♥


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