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Review:magnolia_magic says:
Hi! I read your blog post in the forums about this story, and since Dean/Luna is my favorite pairing ever, I just had to make time to review it :)

I think you've got a wonderful first chapter here. I think you did a great job of exploring Luna's subtleties and little quirks...she's so difficult to write (I can attest to that!), and your version of her felt very true to the books. Her dialogue was perfect too; she says things so matter-of-factly, but they sound strange to everyone but her. Great job with her! And I'm looking forward to getting to know Dean a little better in future chapters :)

My favorite scene was the part right after Bill tells them about the battle at Hogwarts. For some reason that just struck me, the two of them hugging right before the battle. It was just a wonderful quiet moment before all the craziness that is the Hogwarts battle.

I do have just a little bit of concrit, and it's really just a personal preference kind of thing, so you can take this or leave it :) In your summary, you mention that the relationship might not last. I get that you want to stick to canon, but for me that statement almost takes away from the significance of what they have while they're together. Does that make sense? If it were me, I'd keep the focus on the present with this couple, instead of drawing attention to the fact that they aren't permanent.

I absolutely love your ending. That promise of a new beginning...it's just such an inspiring way to end a chapter (and begin the rest of your story.) I especially love the line: "There was longing in that look-to live and love and to not waste another minute ever again." I just think that's beautiful. A great note to end on :)

Keep up the good work! I really enjoyed this, and I hope you know that there are Dean/Luna fans out there that will follow it :)

--Maggie

Author's Response: Dean is a delight to write in some places, Luna is a never-ending struggle, therefore it pleased me so much that you liked this version of her. Yes, Bill telling them about the Battle felt very poignant for me too. That moment they both realised they're going somewhere dangerous and that it was important to admit they cared about each other to a certain extent. I'm so glad you picked up on that.

Your concrit makes sense to me, and I already took that part out. I'm horrible with summaries, always adding these things that I think will make it more interesting, but in reality they just dumb the summary down. Thank you for being honest about that. :)

The ending was nice to write, I could dwell a little on the happy part instead of the more sinister ones.

Maggie! This review is fantastic and I am forever grateful. I appreciate you taking the time to review and I hope you're not angry with me for taking such a long time to reply. I hope you'll want to still read the next chapters if I ever get the courage to post them.

Liz


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