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Review:Owlpost68 says:
Huh, I wasn't expecting them both to be all down in the dumps, that was surprising. It worked though, it's what made the chapter unique. I got a real feel for what they were both going through, it was pretty intense in a good way. It's strange 'cause I've never seen someone describe people's emotions about this topic in such detail before, it was really good! The only thing I might go over again is in the beginning it sort of goes a bit into present tense which I've gotten a lot better at noticing since WMM is in present lol. A couple other sentences were maybe a little awkward, but nothing big, you and Elenia did a great job! Now I'm excited to find out how her birthday goes, if he thinks she just went out with him 'cause she wants to be an auror. But Lucy will deal with that, she'd set James straight. lol.
Great job hun!

Author's Response: They were pretty down in their own minds, but I think in a situation with a new person both of them would try to act a lot braver and... happier than they really wanted to. That's actually awesome to hear that you liked the emotions! I worked a lot on including all the little things that she was thinking so I'm glad that paid off!

And thanks! I will take a look at the tenses, and keep an eye on them :)

Thanks so much for reviewing hun! I have to finish editing chapter 31 of kow then I will be working on five. I'll talk to you later!!♥

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