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Review:Aguamenti123 says:
Hi, here to review your entry :)
Firstly, I thought the opening was really poignant, and the feeling of your one-shot improved from there. You wrote Sirius and James' relationship brilliantly, and this was so heartfelt it made me sad! My favourite part of this, however, was when James was about to get married, and that line about him becoming a man just made it, loved that!
I also liked your interpretation of the proverb, I wouldn't have thought of that, because they aren't actually brothers. Maybe a mention of Regulus would have been good here, because James was so much more than him. Maybe it didn't need it really, I suppose. Another thing you did well was Sirius and Harry's relationship, that was so cute! I also mostly liked your choices of words. The whole thing flowed nicely.
Thanks for entering, I'll have the results up soon!
- Aguamenti123 xx

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading, reviewing, and making an awesome challenge! I really struggled with how to open this story and I am glad that it got better from there on out.

I have always been a huge fan of James and Sirius and I am really happy to hear that I was able to bring out the relationship between the two of them. I will admit that the line that you pointed out about James becoming a man was my favorite to! =)

I was really trying to focus more on James and Sirius. I felt that Sirius ran away and stayed at James's home so they were a lot closer than Regulus and Sirius were. Although, Regulus is my favorite character. Anyways...I am glad that you liked it!

Thanks again! =)


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