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Review:patroni says:
WHAT?! No, but that's... WHAT?!


I keep writing this in every review but this chapter really was my favourite. I love that you explored every detail of Fred's homecoming, from the clock to its impact on his family. I'd grown so accustomed to seeing things from the point of view of the Cliodna's Clock residents that I'd forgotten what it might be like for the people left behind. But everything in the Burrow seemed utterly real- Molly's reaction, the general buzz of curiosity from everyone, George stomping through to see the clock and then leaving in a state of frustration, longing, anger, disappointment- just everything.

And the conversation between the two brothers! It was wonderful to see them quarrel for once. Well, not quarrel but be in such different positions that their usual, fluid harmony- talking at the same time, knowing what the other is thinking- becomes difficult to achieve. And you took them in directions that we haven't really seen in the books before: real, aching sadness, desperation, almost-anger at times. And yet they remain believable as a double act throughout. I suppose it must have been an interesting dynamic to explore and you did it beautifully.

Another moment that took my breath away was the simply image of a mother gazing through the window at two fuzzy shapes, willing the scene to exist and yet knowing that it is impossible. And so she stands there although she is itching to run out and check, because she thinks that if she leaves, the scene will too. You anticipate every loophole in your narration and extend your story to cover them, making the whole scene seem believable, real and watertight.

To go back to the last line though, WHAT?! Oh, the confusion of the guard in the first chapter seems even more significant now. Must.Turn (?).Page.

Author's Response: Hi, patroni! Sorry for taking so long to respond to this. D:

I knew that this chapter was going to be one of the longest in the bunch. I wanted to take my time with it, since the whole duel led up to this moment. It would feel like cheating the readers to only skim the 24-hour experience when Fred worked so hard to get this prize.

It felt so otherworldly for me to write the Burrow after I'd been writing about all these dead characters in the afterlife for so long. But it also felt really nice to get back into that, with the warmth and life and canon-ness. I was very careful with the clock scene, since I'd been imagining it for months in my head and wanted to write it exactly as I saw it.

I can't tell you how wonderful it is to hear that you liked how I wrote the twins' interaction. It was difficult to take them how they were in canon (finishing each other's sentences, almost always in agreement with each other), and show how they've grown in slightly different directions since Fred's death. Fred especially is different, because of all he's been through. But still, they're the same old Fred and George underneath it all, and they ended up on the same page even if they took different routes to get there.

Your reception of the scene of Molly at the window is giving me warm fuzzies. ♥

Thank you, so very much, for taking the time to read this story and for leaving me these amazing reviews. :)

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