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Review:IceCubism says:
Though the story plot is quite dry and cliche, your awesome writing skills make up for it. I think the plot could be made more intriguing by adding some fresh new ideas and perhaps a few twists instead of following the same "fall in love, makeover, use someone else to make crush jealous" sort of story. I am SO SORRY if I sound harsh and mean, but I sincerely like this story and I would just like to give a few suggestions :)

I love Mae as a character, but she seems a tad too manipulative for cooking up this whole scheme to "crack" Dom, Carolyn, Robyn and Alessandria, and go out with Fred to make James notice her. I know Mae is not using Fred and truly has some feelings for him now, but I don't like it that much that she actually snogged him at first just for the sake of making James jealous. Just my viewpoints.

It makes Mae a little evil, so maybe you could try to make her nicer? It would be better for the readers to be able to sympathize with Mae - it'd make the story much better.

Thanks for writing this amazing story and if you update more, I'd definitely continue to read it!

Author's Response: Thank you for your suggestions! I really lie to hear feedback on what people think of the story and how I can improve it. As I was writing the story, I did see how evil and manipulative Mae seems and it almost seems as she has some Slytherin qualities. In the next chapter, it reveals a lot about the character making some ruder, some more energetic and some nicer - Mae one of these. The next chapter changes the whole view of the story.
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