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Review:Roots in Water says:
It's Roots in Water here with your review for the review swap! Well, I've already read the first two chapters of this story so it seems only natural to continue on with the third!

This was a very interesting chapter and a great addition to the previous two. I particularly liked the event you chose to explore in this chapter because it was a moment where Remus could have lost his whole pack, just like he gained them during the past two chapters. It was a very nice contrast.

As well, I really liked how you balanced the chapter with the secret almost being let loose in a very dangerous manner due to Sirius and Snape and with Lily figuring it out and being very supportive.

It was very interesting to read about Sirius' reasoning in this chapter- it definitely added something to the events. Before, the act was just something that definitely showed his recklessness and carelessness, but you added an element of protectiveness to it. Sure, Sirius was making a huge mistake when he acted the way that he did, but he wasn't doing it just for laughs (even if that was a large part of it). He also thought that this was one of the only ways to keep Snape away- to frighten him permanently, and hopefully into silence.

As well, I really liked how you wrote Wolf's section. For the large part the description was auditory, which fit with the setting- Wolf was behind a door that's supposed to act like a part of a tree trunk- of course there wouldn't be any windows for him to see through. Wolf's anger at the situation was perfectly reasonable and believable- he had just heard someone attacking his packmate!

However, along that same line, I noticed that towards the end of that section you also included a moment where Wolf saw James get hit with a spell- how did he do this through a door? Or am I just misunderstanding the layout of the scene?

All in all I think that you did a great job with your exploration of this scene. You added an extra depth to it and it was very interesting to see it through the eyes of something more animal than human. I wonder what your next addition to the story will be- perhaps when he's spying on the werewolf packs for Dumbledore after their graduation? Anyway, great job!

Author's Response: Yay! I've come to respond the review that you left a week ago! Haha! Took me a sorry! XD

I'm trying to stay away from doing a 'day-to-day' life of Remus Lupin and instead I'm going more for the important days. There will be a lot of fast-forwarding into his life to show those moments that we heard about but never really got to see. Not that it'll be canon but it'll be my take on it.

As for his pack...well, let's just say that "I can giveth and I can taketh away." But I'll just leave it at that. :P

Snape was a very smart individual and saw Remus for what he was. He was curious and I really do see him trying to make sure that Remus was a werewolf before going to the Governors about it. He would've done it just to get him (and perhaps the other 3) expelled. Sirius saw it as a threat and wanted to take care of it. Not in a very good manner mind you but he just didn't think things through. He doesn't really understand Remus's guilt.

The tree trunk is not fully 100% sealed. There was a small hole where Wolf could look through and that's where from he saw James and Snape. I'll read it through and see if I can explain it better. I'm very detailed oriented person so I'm glad that the description was good! I'm always worried about Wolf's section since there's always very little dialogue.

Ah, the next addition is already planned out. In fact, the rest of the story is planned out but only myself and Dan know about it. XD I like to stay linear when it comes to the story line BUT we never know where we're going to land next. Mwahahaha! You'll see it soon enough and I hope you'll like it!

Thanks for your review, Roots! I saw that you updated the Moody fic so I'll be making my way there soon. :)


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