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Review:Jchrissy says:
So obviously I re-read this chapter to review, and I have to say I like it even more the second time. Not that I didn't love it the first.

You are making these teenagers, teenagers! And it's awesome. I feel like so often the reason I don't like next gen is because it's an imitation of Marauders era. And that just doesn't fit. In that era they were had the possibility of being murdered for anything constantly looming around them, and though they were just teenagers, they were also people caught in the middle of a war. Next Gen is a time when thing are okay, and happy, and they all have supportive and stable families, they are going to be way different people than their ancestors. Okay, ramble rant over, back to your story ;).

The way that you move through the day feels really fluid to me, we don't need to actually be with them during the class and know what they're learning every time, it could get dull, but just following them through the classes is plenty to make it feel like they actually are at Hogwarts.

Scorpius feels really different in this, I can feel the way he'd be able to be cold like a Malfoy, but the prejudices that his father possessed have melted away. He's still judgmental enough to go through the list of Al's cousins, but to be honest he's probably right. The friendship you have between those two feels realistic, and not just a concoction to get Rose and Scorpius together.

I love that Scorpius, despite thinking she's hot, really doesn't seem to like her. It's much more interesting and believable than both of them 'pining away but never loving for the curse of the Slytherin and Gryffindor' and it's easier to identify with thinking a person is attractive without actually liking them as opposed to liking someone and not acting on it, for me at least.

I really have to say that what makes your story so special and easy to fall into is that you're letting it tell itself. I can feel how real these characters are to you, their varied personalities and all the time you've put into creating them, and it just makes for an intoxicating read.

I didn't find myself confused anywhere in the story as to what was going on or where they were located, nor did I find myself having to wade through descriptions to get to the point, so I'd definitively say that your description are spot on.

The flow feels smooth and natural, You're giving us new information to keep it interesting but not sparing on anything that would make it feel rushed.

Okay, obviously if i haven't made it clear enough, I very much enjoyed this chapter (and the next 7 ;) ) and will review at least one more for this request!

Thanks so much for requesting, darling ♥

Author's Response: I'm really glad you like Al and Scorpius's friendship! :) In Rose/Scorpius fics, it often does end up feeling like Albus and Scorpius are just friends because it's convenient for the plot, and I really wanted to avoid that.

I'm also glad that you like the fact that Scorpius isn't sitting around mooning over her. He's definitely got a bit of a thing where Rose is concerned that goes beyond "You're hot and I hate you," but at least early on, he also really doesn't like her. He's quite happy to jump on the Rose bandwagon once he realises that maybe he's just been seeing one side of her, but he definitely doesn't start out besotted.

♥ Thank you!

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