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Review:bester_jester says:
How do you do it? Your writing is just so captivating and so moving... and in this one there wasn't even a word of dialogue!

I loved the way that I thought she was going to get a happy ending - meeting Terry and whatnot. But it felt too easy for it to happen that way though, and apparently you felt so too! Didn't see the breakup coming, which was amazing in itself.

I love that you write about war - the aftermath is something that seriously gets overlooked, even in "real life". My country just lost five soldiers in Afghanistan all in one day, and all I could think of were their families and their wives. It's just awful.

Anyway. I digress. You really skillfully wove in her constant, "dutiful" mourning - destined from birth to mourn and whatnot. I guess I've never really considered what it would be like to grow up knowing that someone who should be with me, isn't. So you've captured that really well.

Poor Susan :( such a sad life! In my happy little world, she meets a new, better Terry who drives away her ghosts! ... or she does it herself, because she's a strong, independent young woman!

Anyway. Thanks for pointing me in the direction of this story - please never stop writing, ever.

Author's Response: Poor Susan, indeed!
In my own happy little world too, she gets a happy ending - she drives her ghosts away because as you pointed out she's a strong, independent woman AND she meets a better Terry.
I am convinced that, at least in fiction, if the heroes go through hardships, they ought to have a happy ending. But I try to keep my fiction as realistic as possible, so I couldn't give Susan a break, because Life wouldn't.
For a moment when I was writing I considered making Terry her knight in shiny armor who would save her from her sadness, but it felt wrong - as you pointed out, it would just be too easy. She had to save herself, no one could do it for her. In a way, I think I wrote this as a reminder to myself. I hated having them break up, but somehow it felt that it couldn't be any other way. Sometimes "perfect" relationships are the hardest to keep. :p

I love that you love that I write about the aftermath of the war, haha! I totally agree that it gets overlooked and I don't understand why - I feel that in a way the war continues even after it has ended, because people are still hurt by it every day, even after years. The last time my country was in a war was 50 years ago (and mind you it was a civil war) and we're still affected by it, even though no one seems to notice and no one ever talks about it. As a sociology student, I can't resist exploring the results of such an extreme social and psychological situation as a war!

As always, I'm extremely glad that you liked the story. I was a bit afraid that it was too gloomy, but I can't help it, I live on gloom! And it was written on a particularly sad day, so I guess it was something that I had to get out of my system, ha!

Also, it's a relief to know that it worked even without the dialog - for some reason I find it easier to write something without a dialog and so I tend to avoid it! But because Susan is so lost in herself, I thought that the lack of dialog would stress the lack of interaction with the outside world. So I'm very happy that it worked. :)

Your praises on my writing are making me blush... I can promise that even if I stop writing, I will never want to stop writing! If that makes any sense. I can also promise that I will have a new story up by Monday! ;)

Oh, I got carried away. Again...

So - thank you, thank you, thank you for the wonderful review! It means A LOT (actually, much more than that) to have someone as supportive as you comment on my writing. :3

Sophie :D

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