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Review:Yoshi_Kitten says:
Well dang! I was really hoping to be the first person to review this, but it looks like someone else already beat me to it, lol! =P

Anyways, wow! This chapter was fantastic! I think I have a new favorite now, lol. There were SOO many things I liked about this. Everything was just so perfect, and pretty much exactly how I would have imagined it happening in the books. You're writing is so good, I honestly feel like I am reading straight out of a Harry Potter book! I mean, I could read this story ALL day if it were long enough, lol! When Draco asked Narcissa what the Dark Lord could possibly want from them, if not gold, and she leaned over and whispered "You" I seriously got chills. That part was my absolute favorite yet!! =)

I know it's probly irrelevant, but I still wish we could have gotten the Auror's name. I'll bet it was a real smack in the face for Draco to have no other choice to submit to the man. I think you did an excellent job of getting his prideful, arrogant attitude across. And I liked the wounded animal reference; I feel like that was a nicely added touch, and it was very effective at getting the point across. I can't even imaging what it must be like, having someone there who hates you, watching your every move, just waiting for you to screw up so that they may have an excuse to send you off to prison. I was kind of happy for Draco when the Auror wasn't really able to get anything on him. And Draco trying to break into Lucius' wine cabinet was amusing too. I could totally see him doing something like that, lol! XD

Omg, you write Bellatrix SO well. I especially LOVED your description of her appearance and how maddening she looked. You definitely did her insanity some justice, lol. Once again, I felt like I was reading straight out of an HP book. Bellatrix Lestrange is a difficult character to write, but you did it so effortlessly here. I usually hate her so much, but she was actually quite fun to read in this. We never really got to see very much of her in the books, so it's great to have a story like this that sheds some more light on her character. And you know, I guess I never considered the first time that Draco ever met his aunt Bellatrix tho. I think I just assumed that he already knew her, lol. But now that I think about it, however, it makes sense that this would be his first time seeing her in person. I mean, she was in Azkaban for all of his life, and then he was in school when the break out happened...

And that's another thing I love about this story; is how you can make me think of things that I've never even considered before. But then again, that's the whole point of writing, isn't it, to make the reader think? I am SO happy I stumbled onto this story, its so amazing! In fact, I am definitely going to be nominating this story for a Dobby - in every category I can. Because you definitely deserve it, for sure! ;)

Author's Response: Well, hello, dear! Nice to see you again!

Wow. That's really high praise. I do try to keep all of my plot lines and characterization tight to canon in this story, but you even think the writing sounds like the books? Woo-hoo!

Poor Draco. He's slowly beginning to realize that he and his mother are in big, big trouble. But he's not completely there yet. I think it isn't until he meets his aunt that it really starts to sink in. She's utterly terrifying, and yet she's merely one of the Dark Lord's followers.

As far as the Auror's name goes I generally shy away from naming every last character in my stories. Suffice it to say that his identity isn't really important, just his attitude toward Draco. You're right, though, he does hate what Draco represents to him, and he wouldn't have hesitated to take that hatred out on Draco if he'd been given half a reason.

Whew! I'm glad you liked the way I portrayed Bella. I wasn't entirely sure whether I was laying it on too thick or not thickly enough or getting her just plain wrong. I agree, she is not easy to write. It's so hard to make her mad and menacing at the same time and not have her come off as simply goofy. I'm pretty sure this would have been the first time Draco would have knowingly met Bellatrix, brief encounters before her imprisonment aside. I'm sure he knew of her, but I like to think that he was getting his first real experience here.

I try hard to come up with different angles to explore Draco's story from in this. He certainly went through some horribly interesting times over this summer. Speaking of which, time to go work on chapter 4! Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!


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