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Review:magnolia_magic says:
Hi! Here from review tag!

Wow, this story is so intense! I really admire your ability to get those raw emotions across...I can feel Grindelwald's passion and bitterness and destructive love, and I love being thrust right into the middle of it all. Reading this was definitely an experience, and I'm glad this caught my eye!

I'll just go ahead and agree with your other reviewers: I loved the description, and I don't think it was too much. The vivid imagery and metaphors make the story, in my opinion. I especially love the paragraph describing Ariana as floating on Gellert's ocean of emotions, and then all the sea metaphors that follow. That part really shows a good grasp of technique that I wish I had :P

One other thing your reviewers have said that I agree with: if you write this pairing again, I'd love to see more character development. The descriptions and emotional impact were spot on and so intense, but I didn't get a sense of who Grindlewald and Ariana are as people. I loved reading this one-shot, but it could have been about anyone. Does that make sense? And for a one-shot that focuses on style and imagery, that's perfectly okay, and I think it works well here. Just something to think about for future reference :)

I think this is really well done, vivid and emotional, and you definitely have a way with words. I enjoyed reading it! Keep up the great work :)

--Maggie

Author's Response: Hi! Thanks for reviewing ( even though it’s from review tag)

Thanks! As a writer I always try to convey the emotions to the reader and I’m glad you could feel the feelings I tried to convey. I hope it was a positive experience ;p

Well most of the time I really focus on character development but this time I really tried to focus on description mostly ( or actually almost only). I wanted to see if I was capable of such descriptions so this was really a make or break one-shot. That’s why I said something about it in my AN because in my opinion I’ve never been a star in descriptions or metaphors ( so that’s why I focused on this). Well to be honest with you I didn’t have a pairing in mind when I was writing this but the moment I was almost done I turned it into this specific pairing, so I can see why you would say it could have been about anyone ( as that wasn’t my focus) so it makes perfectly sense to me. Thanks! I think this will be an one of a kind of story in my story list though.

Thank you!




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