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Review:StormThief17 says:
This is really a beautiful story.

I think you really did well with Draco. He wasn't too sweet and nice, which would have been OOC, but he was also someone who I could see Astoria being best friends with. Also, the line he said about her father killing her was very good.

And Astoria was just sensational. Like seriously amazing. What I liked best was her strength. The way she didn't let it dominate her life. She wasn't wallowing in anguish all the time. It hurt her unbelievably, but she could keep living through it. I think you also did a great job with the struggle she was going through about her father and whether or not she should help him at the end. I kind of know her feeling because I have a brother who is a bit of a jerk, but I still can't help but defend him and his actions in front of people. Obviously that's on a much smaller scale then what's going on with Astoria and her father, but I think you really portrayed the idea that however bad someone is, they're still your family and you can't just abandon them.

The description was captivating. Every emotion, every scene, was captured so perfectly in your writing. I loved this line: "Where grass and flowers swirled their whites and greens together and created the kind of tranquility that she begged to be part of". The lines around that are also brilliant. It ties Astoria and her surroundings together so well!

Overall, I think you just did a brilliant job of getting to the heart of a matter as serious as child abuse. And doing it in a wizarding setting just added to the beauty of this piece. Great job!!! :)


Author's Response: That line was one of my favorites. It just felt so raw and sincere that I could really feel Draco's anger behind it.

I'm so happy that Astoria was easy to relate to for you, obviously I hope that no one can relate to her in the sense that they've been through it, but the idea that you can feel for her makes me believe that I did a good job in portraying her circumstances realistically.

Thank you so much for this wonderful review, I really wanted to make the seriousness of the abuse clear without turning it into anything close to a gory piece, and your comments definitely make me feel like I did that.

Thanks again for this amazing review, is absolutely made my day! ♥

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