I think you did a really incredible job of taking us through Remus' emotions, from his guilt about leaving Tonks, and his anger about being a coward, all the way through to his realization of his own worth and his resolve to fight. It was great to see it all packed into a one-shot without it being overwhelming at all.
I feel so bad for Remus. He is in such a difficult spot. I thought it was a really nice insight into all the anguish he must have been going through. And Tonks here was great, if a little colder than usual. But that's to be expected I think! Ted and Andromeda were a little harsher than I expected(especially Ted, Andromeda I understand more b/c of Bellatrix) but that's just my head canon kicking in. They were fine, and I completely understand what they must have been feeling in this situation, but I guess I think maybe Ted could be a little softer--still rock solid and firm about protecting his daughter, but not so ballistic. In DH he didn't strike me as the type to "roar savagely". Of course this is completely your story, so if that's the way you see Ted, then write him just like that! I just thought I'd give you my thoughts on that.
You also did a great job with the description. You set the scene on the doorstep perfectly with the whole first paragraph. I especially loved the way you talked about the scratches reminding him of the shrieking shack. I think it really set up how much being a werewolf affects him.
Great, powerful story! I think you just did great with the character of Remus. And I love the ending line!
Author's Response: Thanks, I'm really glad you liked how I did Remus. He is my favourite character so I would hate to get him wrong!
I know what you mean about Tonks being a little colder than usual, but I figured it sort of had to be that way, because obviously she is very angry with him for leaving and for constantly putting himself down or seeing himself as a monster or an animal.
Again, I know what you mean about Ted and Andromeda. But the way I figured it was that they had to watch Tonks be miserable for a year, because Remus refused to be with her, they had to watch her be miserably all the time knowing there is nothing they can do to help you, that must have been the hardest thing for a parent to go through! Then Remus finally does decide to be with her and they get married, she gets pregnant and he leaves again, once again making Tonks completely miserable and back to square one, only in a worse state because she is going to have Teddy, you know? Tonks is their only daughter, only child, so I'd imagine that they are very protective of her, and the way they see it is that Remus is causing her so much hurt and pain, and they are going to do all in their power to prevent him from hurting her more. When they sort of lash out at him, it's more venting their frustration at watching their child be miserable and being unable to help, than actually wanting to hurt him, if that makes sense. With Ted I wanted it to be a momentary loss of control, that's why he is slightly horrified after he hit Remus, just because it is not something he would ever to, you know?
Anyway, thanks so much, I'm glad you chose this story to read and review! :-)