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Review:water_lily43175 says:
So, normally I sort of review while I'm reading. I think that's why some of my reviews seem long and rambling. But right from the start of this one, I figured that this would be The One where it all went to hell, and I couldn't stop reading to type anything! So I'll see what I can cobble together now because WOW, what a chapter!

First off, I love the chapter titles. LOVE LOVE LOVE them. Especially this one. You must have had great fun on the idioms websites!

The stuff in this chapter happens so fast, it's so exciting! I'm guessing that this is the one that you were struggling with, and I can see why you were concerned, but I think it worked out really well in the end. It IS fast-paced, but when something this dramatic is happening, fast-paced works. And it's daft, because I should have expected it, but I was still really shocked when Rose said that Stubbs, Pheasey and pretty much EVERYONE had gone down with this illness. And a bit sad when Lily got ill as well, the poor thing! :(

Nat disappointed me in this one. Hiding? REALLY? Tsk tsk. Good on Scorpius for giving her a lecture! I like Methy's idea of investigating things more, I really am warming to him now! Although I didn't not like him before, it's just he came across as being a bit obnoxious in the first chapter. But I actually love him now.

More Scorose chat, which I liked. Nothing's really changed between them YET which is obviously making it challenging for them to work together to try to sort this out. Which I LOVE. So much opportunity for character development. OM NOM. A bit excited for more.

I loved the Ravenclaw door's question. Oh, Scorp, you adorable thing you. Bless him.


Author's Response: Yeah, this was the chapter which was an outrageous PAIN to write. The transition between 'people are getting ill' and 'almost everyone is incapacitated' was clunky and difficult. This chapter wound up not as bad as I feared, but you should have seen it (or, really, shouldn't) before editing. I cut a good 500 words of sluggish prose born of struggling to move things along. Didn't want it to happen too fast, found it hard to envision the step-by-step process by which everything went to hell. I'm pretty happy with it in the end but it was horrid to work on.

I do like my chapter title theme. Somewhere down the line I became incapable of writing fics where chapters don't have some sort of theme, be it the 'The' of Shade/Shadow, the 'ions' of Renaissance, the quotes of BTP. Fire/heat/etc is an entertaining one. Certainly each fic in this series, if it gets that far, will have its own theme. I do love my idioms. Though I had more fun with the riddle website for the Ravenclaw door. That's going to have to make a comeback at some point.

Nathalie Lockett in this story is... quite a different creature to what one might expect. There are reasons and she has history but certainly disapproving faces are appropriate at this time. I'm glad Methuselah's growing on you; he's writing himself, his investigative endeavours weren't originally planned but they'll really work for pacing. So PLENTY more of him next chapter.

More BTP next but! As promised, all new content from here on. Thanks for reviewing!

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