|Review:||Violet Gryfindor says:|
While I can't blame you for being sort of terrified, I think you've pinned down aspects of Snape that lots of his fans (myself included) find it easy to gloss over. His love for Lily, obsessive and painfully long-lasting as JKR revealed it, kind of ruined him for me, at least in canon. Snape/Lily can be a pretty ship, but if a person looks close enough at the canon, the "creepy infatuated teenage boy" isn't just there -he's front and centre.
And you've also captured other important aspects of Snape, like his need for acceptance, which leads him to act out roles that suit him as ill as that black leather jacket. It's a perfect choice to make him try to be like Sirius, that rich boy (that was when I knew who the character was), even while he hates Sirius and hates Muggle things and hates the world - oh my god he's such a teenage boy. There's a great authentic feel about this story - reading this made me imagine 1970s Britain and rebellious adolescents who listen to punk rock (or better yet, became punk rockers). It's something most fanfic authors forget to include, and you use it to bring out Snape's Muggle-world connections in a fantastic way.
Is it sad that my favourite line was when he claimed that the moonlight had been pee'd on? Best deconstruction of a cliched description ever. Who needs romantic moonlight when you can think things like that? I'll probably never look at the moon the same way now.
This portrayal of Snape and his relationship with Lily (is it even a relationship? Can it be unrequited love if the person doing the loving is not only doing it against his will, but being all obsessive and creepy?) has been the kind of refreshing thing that I needed to come across. What you've done here is inspiring, and I hope that others start pushing the boundaries like this. Amazing work!
Author's Response: First off, sorry for the ages it took for me to reply, I'm a total procrastinator. It's terrible, really.
Anyway. On with my woefully inadequate response. Thank you for giving my extremely biased Marauder-fan interpretation of Snape a chance in the first place; I'd be somewhat hard-pressed to do that if the subject was one of my favourites.
I'll have to agree with you about the Lily ship. I think I might've liked him more if he'd had a non-Lily reason to turn double agent, but I like turning dislike into fic more. xD
The need for acceptance thing was a bit of a gamble, since I haven't read canon for ages and I just sort of guessed that he might be less than pleased with his partially-self-imposed isolation. Thinking about it now, he's always in some sort of group, isn't he? Either Lilyandsev, or the junior DEs, or splitting time betwwen the senior DEs and the Order. So I seem to have accidentally made some sort of observation about Snape, when I just wanted to be able to picture him in uncomfortable clothing. Thank you for pointing that out to me, and I'm really glad it worked for you.
I've always been sort of interested by Snape's half-blood status, and how he'd interact with the Muggle world when, if he hadn't been a wizard, he'd have probably identified (or attempted to, anyway) with the radicalised youth subcultures of '70s Britain. And I've always loved The Clash.
To be honest, the pee-light sentence is probably the best sentence I've ever written, including that train wreck of a stream-of-consciousness one in Carelessness.
Thank you ever so much for taking the time out to review this fic! Your reviews are always a joy to read. :D