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Review:Arithmancy_Wiz says:
Hello again, Lia. I'm back with the second half of my review. I hope you don't mind that I'm reviewing the last two chapters together.

I really like how the story is progressing. I am definitely starting to see the bits and pieces of S&S starting to peak their way through the plot. I didn't think about it when I read the first chapter but there is some fun symmetry between the three Black sisters and the Dashwood girls.

Like in the first chapter, I really enjoyed the atmosphere you created, particularly at the start of chapter two. The lingering storm was a nice metaphor for Lucius' continuing unease. Structure-wise, I thought the conversation between Lucius and Siobhan at the start of chapter three was the best written scene so far. It flowed really well, the dialogue was very natural, and it actually revealed a lot about the characters' personalities, especially when followed up with the scene showing how they first met. It made me connect with them both, which raises the stakes for the Lucius/Narcissa interactions to follow.

I'm really glad we got paired up for the swap this time around and I got an excuse to read your story. I'll definitely be checking back for updates!

Author's Response: Hi again, Becky :)

Nope, I don't mind at all. I do the same thing sometimes.

When I first got this pairing, I really didn't know what to do. I didn't know where to put Lucius, and obviously he'd be paired with Narcissa somehow. But, like you, I got some of the symmetry later on. For example Andromeda and Marianne are quite similar - so similar it's scary. If you read on, you'll get to see :P

Really? I would not have thought that at all. If anything, I thought some things were missing from it. That's what I love about reviewers and their opinions! Siobhan, I think, is proving to be a very interesting character. She's very clever, though not at first glance. Having such a great dynamic with Lucius already only adds to the drama of it. If they're so smitten however will this ship sink? It does raise the bar, and so far Lucius/Siobhan are winning.

Thank you for reviewing!

Lia


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