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Review:DumbledoresArmyOfOne says:
This gave me chills. Really. i have goosebumps.
(although when Voldy and Bellatrix were dancing i did have an avpm flashback xD)
Anyways, this was positively beautiful. Bellatrix is such a complex character, and you did an amazing job in characterizing her. Voldemort was... surprising. My first thought was that the tenderness must be a ploy to get her to help him, but by the sound of it she's so devoted she'd do it anyways. It seems quite out of character for him todisplay any sort of tenderness or caring, but you made it seem believable.
My favourite part of this story is "It was her favorite time of day, the few sparse moments in which the sun succumbed to the horizon and night took over like a predator. The black patches played about her legs like the children she would never have, lashing out at one another in jealously each time she twitched or took too deep of a breath, but she paid them no mind, staring instead at the drizzle that fell outdoors. The shadows swept over her cool, pale skin daringly, coming closer to her than her husband ever would in their marriage of convenience, their relation little more than a shared name. The invading darkness hemorrhaging into the sky before her knew her better than almost anyone."
I love the word choice and the description. It really paints a picture in my head.
All in all, this was exquisite.
~Gill

Author's Response: Hello! Thanks for the review, and I'm sorry it's taken me a little while to post a response!

I did try to play around with Voldemort's character a little bit in this story, in terms of trying to make him more a figure of desire and attraction. It was almost like I tried to see him the way that Bellatrix sees him. Your first thought wasn't wrong, though; it is part of his plot to get her to help him out, and she definitely fell for it hook, line, and sinker!

I like that paragraph, too. The challenge this story was written for (well, one of them) required me to use imagery, and while I ordinarily love toying with description, it was fun to just go all out in this one-shot.

Thanks for your lovely review :)

-Amanda


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