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Review:Jchrissy says:
What an intriguing prologue! So, something that stood out, you do a really good job writing in second person and still adding detail. I feel like for some reason detail is just ill fitting, either terribly undone or the imagery just doesn't fit, but this all felt extremely realistic and natural.

And I'm already so excited about what is going on with Molly!! It doesn't fit any one illness, does it have to do with the book? Is it something entire made up? Ah!

I love the originalty of this story, the feeling of tension just hanging over us and that desire to keep reading. Something that I also don't see done very often - creating the feeling of anxiety using really soft words. It's so beautiful when it's done well, and you've just blown that out of the water with this!

Amazing start, I'm excited to continue!!

Author's Response: Hey there! Thanks so much! Second person was a bit of a risk when I started this, since I'd never written anything like this beforehand and so had no idea how it would turn out (or, actually, how it was supposed to turn out). Gah, I'm so glad the description works, since I tend to write far too much of it :) Thanks!

Mm... you'll have to wait to find out what's going on with Molly, I'm afraid - and you may be onto something by referencing the book... or you might not be. Who knows? ;)

Thank you so much! I really enjoyed writing this so I'm so happy to see that you enjoyed reading it (and may or may not have picked up on a couple of important things ;D).

Thank you so much for the wonderful review!

Aph xx

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