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You can't pretend it's not serious when parent-meeting is occurring, James! YAY Albus. Bring on the Albus. Hee, Scorose. Hee, outraged Albus. It's kind of cute the way he's a bit of a mini-Harry (though is sounding a little more like his Uncle Ron in his outrage). Oh, ironic turn of events, James. I do love it when he shows he has a brain, that his laid-back-ness isn't just thoughtlessness, he really just IS a decent guy to everyone.

Exposition!James time! Or perhaps bad exposition. Oh dear, there's no way this is going to go well. He left it a little bit too long before telling her about this, and it doesn't help that he's only telling her because he has to. And this is the bit where he CAN be very thoughtless, I suppose! Bless him. Not sure it's a good idea to say there's nothing else, either. Maybe say that there's a lot of history and it's a long STORY... oh dear, James. Oh dear, oh dear...

Woot, Lily and Maddie time. Oh, and there's Kit, too, he'll do. Probably more than 'do', teaching James about football sounds entertaining. And poor Lily, likely having a thing for someone but not daring to do anything about it due to the Muggle/non-Muggle divide (James is not the man to set a good example with such a thing). But James is right, still! She's got good friends. Could be a lot worse. Very sweet chapter.

Author's Response: The thing with the parent-meeting is that it's purely for Carlotta to get her own back on James for throwing her at his ENTIRE family at his Quidditch matches. To them, it's not serious - or at least, they're trying to hide from the fact that it suggests something more serious than either of them want. But however they look at it, it IS hard to escape the fact that whatever they have between them is far more complicated and serious than they initially aimed for.

Albus is usually reasonably rational, but here he is most definitely NOT. He, sadly, can be prejudiced when it comes to the Malfoys. And this is the Scorose relevance, I hope you enjoyed it. :) James can be thoughtless, but he is also, as you say, a genuinely open-minded, DECENT bloke. And this is an issue that is close to his heart.

Yeah, James is a total idiot here. He finally has to reveal the dark history of his world ... and still doesn't do it all properly. NOT GOOD. He's not necessarily thoughtless, he has his reasons for keeping quiet, but he doesn't consider the problems that could be caused by not telling her everything. Either way, he's digging himself into an even bigger hole here.

Kit will DO? I'm hoping that in a few chapters' time you will love him as much as you do Lily and Maddie; he's not QUITE had his time to shine yet but it will come. I could possibly have written more of the football conversation but I don't know it in enough depth to do so; the offside rule comment was about as far as I was willing to go! Unlike Maddie teaching James about rugby, where I went to town. Lily is indeed in a pretty sucky situation, only made worse by her oaf of a brother breaking the Statute here, there and everywhere. He's doing the right thing in not trying to talk to her about the issue, because in the wrong circumstances his misdeeds would loom pretty heavily over them both. So all he can do is stand back and let her do what she thinks is right ... which is to suffer in silence. Poor thing. She does, indeed, have good friends to make things easier, clueless as Maddie is. Thanks for reviewing!


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