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Review:ScorpiusRose17 says:
Hi there! I am finally here with your review! Sorry it has taken me so long to get to. Life is crazy as I am sure you can imagine. Anyways...onto the review!

First of all lets talk about the plot. I thought that you did a great job of setting up what is going to happen and what we should be expecting. I think that it is a unique idea to see Alice older especially since I adored her when she was younger in Overcoming Obstacles. Having said that, takes me right into my next review point...characterization.

You did a fabulous job portraying Alice. I thought she was such a sweet character. I also really liked seeing the bond that was created between her and Frank. I like Frank's personality and how he reacts and responds to certain ups and downs. It will be interesting to see how he will respond when news of what is going on with Alice comes to light. Bailey was an interesting character too. I liked how she was almost the complete opposite of Frank in regards to being around Alice. She seems afraid or more reserved. The twins were adorable and I liked that one of them was named Dylan. ;) I really liked Hannah in this chapter. I thought you did a wonderful job bringing out her mother side and it felt completely natural to me as I read it.

I really like the flow of the chapter. Between the characterization (personalities and mannerisms), description, and dialogue it flows in such natural way that I don't see anything that I would consider messy. I also do not see anything grammar wise that is a concern.

I am really interested in this story and seeing where it goes from here. I like that you are taking a real life topic or situation and really making that leap between the magic and muggle world. It makes them seem more human on both sides.

Keep up the awesome writing!!! =)


Author's Response: Hey! No problem at all, I knew you would get to it when you had a chance! :)

I'm really happy that you like it! I was hoping I would be able to deliver with the plot and characterization, especially because I introduced so many characters in this chapter :)

I was actually kind of nervous about this story because I've told you so much about this story so I'm really glad you like the beginning! :D I can't wait to get more of this story out and I hope you'll be an avid reader through the whole thing ;D

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!


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