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Review:academica says:
Hello! Thanks for the shout-out :) I'm here with another requested review for you!

Ouch! For a moment, I thought Narcissa had undergone a drastic personality shift and wanted Harry, Hermione, and Pamela to come to dinner ("oh, good"), but I'm glad that wasn't the case. I thought you did her character just right.

I liked the awkward dinner party a lot. I thought you did a good job with Daphne and Pansy, especially the latter. I especially liked how she reacted to the discussion by asking if marrying Muggleborns was "the only way," because I think it says a lot about what it's like to have beliefs you've held as fact for generations suddenly challenged. I was a little surprised to hear Narcissa admit that Draco is no longer a suitable match for Pansy, though. I would think that she and her son would want to cling to their pride no matter what, especially with Lucius gone (nice way of wrapping up that little loose end, by the way). Same goes for Draco admitting that the Malfoys were now poor. I do like Draco's private conversation with his mother, though, and I felt like the honesty contained therein made more sense character-wise.

I liked the angry flare-up between Draco and Hermione, though. You did a good job keeping them in character, with Hermione sticking to her beloved logic and Draco to his precious pureblood values. I love how Narcissa was mainly worried about her furniture, too! The ending was nice and punchy and I'm looking forward to seeing what happens next. Hopefully Hermione heals up okay!

Great work! I hope this is helpful :)

-Amanda

Author's Response: Hi Amanda! Thanks for another great review!

Oh, ye of little faith... I guess Harry and Hermione were so hungry that they forgot how much Narcissa dislikes them.

Yeah, I ended up having Lucius in Azkaban. I looked back at Lexicon and was so surprised that Harry vouched for him after the war, according to JKR. I decided that it didn't fit the Harry I had made for this story. Plus, I'm just generally confused about that tidbit JKR gave. Maybe in her head she had a whole scenario for it?

The Malfoy family's reputation is completely destroyed. Their names have been dragged through the mud, and they're even the butt of jokes, at this point. Narcissa has managed to keep a small circle of friends, but she's on tenuous ground. Considering everything that's happened to the Malfoy's, Pansy should stay clear away from their name. If Narcissa is too obvious about setting Pansy/Draco up, Pansy and Daphne will know that it's all a ploy, and Pansy might be scared away. Narcissa thinks she'll have more luck getting Pansy to "follow her heart." Narcissa has a ton of pride, but she's also a Slytherin. In the last two years that she's lived poor and unpopular, she's learned a few tough lessons about setting aside pride for something better. (Example: accepting Grimmauld Place from Harry Potter)

I'm glad you liked the Hermione and Draco part! There will be much more of them in the next chapter.

Thank you so much for your review!

Aether




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