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Review:academica says:
Hello again! I'm back with another requested review!

Oh, my, Ron and Hermione are really taking advantage of those few moments alone! Normally I cringe when reading sensual scenes (and thus haven't written one in quite some time), but I think you executed this nicely and left enough to the imagination.

The crime scene was interesting, and, um, vivid. Your description of the curse and the way Goyle and Nott moved about messing up the evidence was chilling. If your goal was to demonstrate (a) how much influence Lady Tenabra has taken in the Ministry and (b) how evil the Blood Order members are, I'd say you accomplished it tidily. I like how Goyle misses his old friend, despite how awful Draco was to him in school. I hope Draco'll keep his head on straight, though.

I really liked getting a peek at Katerina's family and the French Auror. I like how Elena has basically resigned herself to the loss of her sister, though it's sad to imagine that her sister has not really thought about her in four years. I also like how the French Auror was used to show that not even Esme can get her way all the time (or can she?). Your little joke about the Island of Misfit Toys was funny, and it felt like pure Esme :)

The conversation between Percy and Arabella was touching. I like that you opened and closed this chapter with more sentimental scenes, although the latter one was certainly a bit sadder than the first. It's sweet that Arabella told Percy the truth, and I can see romance growing between them that seems to fit a bit more than his dysfunctional relationship with his wife. I'm not sure what will come of it, but I'm interested to find out more.

Nicely done! As always, hope this is helpful.

-Amanda

Author's Response: Hello, again!

I deliberately went sort of light on the details of Ron and Hermione's "alone time" in the Gaunt Shack. It really isn't that type of story. I just wanted to show that the two of them are human and still very much in love with one another, even after so many years of marriage.

Nott is a nasty piece of work. He certainly didn't come out of prison a better person than he went in, but then again, who does really? Goyle is maybe a little less horrible. He's still very much a follower. And he misses Draco in the sense that he wishes he had somebody else he trusts inside the Blood Order. I wouldn't get overly worried about Draco. You'll see...

For a squib, Elena is pretty insightful. She has already accepted it and believes that it is inevitable. We shall see whether she's correct. Dauzat was introduced to try to remind everyone that there is a larger world, and the rest of the world is paying attention to what's going on in Britain. To me, there would still be raw memories left over from the last "British war". And I couldn't help taking a dig at British cuisine. ;)

Percy and Arabela... So I wanted to make it realistic and understandable why she would want to help Percy unseat the Minister. After all, she's been his secretary for a long time. One might assume that she would want to see him stay in power. But don't give up on Percy and Audrey yet. There's more going on with him than meets the eye...

Thanks for another awesome review. I always look forward to them, and as I look back at everything I've written with an eye toward improving it, they are really very helpful!


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