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Review:FallenAmaranth says:
Oh my gosh, cliffhanger or what?

One confusing part was Hugo - was he going to Hogwarts or not? I think you may have confused him with Albus at some points.

I like that Rose is getting annoyed at her parents and uncle, simply because they are being secretive. I get the feeling she's hating the fact that they probably think she's too young ;) But you really do have me interested, Rose meets S.Malfoy - Ooh er - would love to see her response.

If I'm honest, after reading the first two chapters, this should really be a Novel, or a Novella at the least. I feel there is so much you could include, perhaps history will repeat itself(in the Malfoy family)

The sentence structure could be improved, and some description added to help the flow, since your sentences are all sort of 'one-liners', and just to fill them out a little and vary the lengths would make and even more interesting read!

I look forward to seeing where you're going with this!

~ Emily

Author's Response: Hey, I'll go through and edit, thanks for letting me know!
I probally will end up adding some more chapters just need to figure out what happens. I'm glad you liked it though and thanks for reviewing! :)

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